Talk:Und es waren Hirten in derselben Gegend, BWV 248 II/GA1

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Reviewer: Vami IV (talk · contribs) 08:43, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Opening statement

In reviews I conduct, I may make small copyedits. These will only be limited to spelling and punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. For replying to Reviewer comment, please use Done, Fixed, Added, Not done, Doing..., or Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. I will be reviewing this article as the Coordinator of WikiProject Germany. —Vami♜_IV♠ 07:08, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Disclaimer: I have previously reviewed and passed several articles by Gerda, who I consider myself in good terms with. –♠Vami _IV†♠ 08:43, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thank you for doing this. You will have seen that is was sort of a Christmas gift, which Francis Schonken (Bach, citations) and Jmar67 (copy-edits) improved greatly. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 17:17, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

~~responsible for church music at four churches in Leipzig, The first "church" here is redundant and should be removed.~~

Done

History

~~Its first cantata, Jauchzet, frohlocket! Auf, preiset die Tage, BWV 248 I, Italicize.~~

Done

Movements

~~There are several uncited sentences in this section.~~
You are right. I'll go and look for a score to cite those. What I don't know to find is a source for the angel sometimes a soprano, but remember that I heard it that way. (It was there before I started. I'll drop it if I can't find a supporting ref.) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 09:31, 2 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Vami IV, I now used the (online available) music by Carus, giving the page numbers of where the movements begin. Angel not found yet, sorry. Perhaps later today. Need fresh air first ;) - Sorry about the delay, - I am determined to improve articles of people who recently died, and for the last days, there was always one or even two, including giants such as Penderecki which made me write a new article on his Credo. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 14:14, 4 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Works for me, just as long as you respond to the review so it appears in my watchlist. The Which? and Citation Needed tags need to go for the article to pass, of course. –♠Vami _IV†♠ 08:01, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I removed the Soprano thingy, - no solid source. I will stay in the Main article, I'm afraid ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:33, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Also works for me. Good luck with finding a (credible) source. –♠Vami _IV†♠ 11:10, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

~~ABA' What's this apostrophe doing?~~
Its standard notation in classical, marking sections by letters, and using the apostroph for "similar but changed". --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:26, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Ah. Is there a wikilink that can be made for that, to avoid future confusion? –♠Vami _IV†♠ 11:10, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I don't know. Sonata form is linked: exposition - development - recapitulation, the latter similar but not same. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:55, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Is the mark a retake? –♠Vami _IV†♠ 12:55, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
No. I found something at Musical form#Labeling procedures. See that some writers use superscript numbers, but haven't seen that yet. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:03, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I think it's super^duper. AAAAA I just noticed "ternary form", that should be linked. OK, use the supertext (copy: <sup></sup>), link that labelling procedure, so we can close this review. –♠Vami _IV†♠ 11:45, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
I linked ternary, and put the apostrophe up high. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 12:09, 6 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Repeated citation: [...] as Dürr notes.[16] Each section is in again three groups, taking the analogy to the sonata form further: string music, as a first theme, is followed by oboe music as a second theme and combined music as the closing group.[16]
Not sure I understand the problem. --Gerda Arendt (talk) 08:28, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
There's no citation in the way, so there's no need for the first one to be there. The first one's redundant and just soaking up bytes. –♠Vami _IV†♠
OK, will do, - for DYK, they always ask the opposite: ref right behind the fact ;) --Gerda Arendt (talk) 11:55, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- ~~Another repeated [16] here: "Und alsobald war da bei dem Engel" ("And suddenly there was with the angel"),[16] telling of the heavenly hosts.[16]~~
- ~~Another repeat: pedal point.[49] The third section, about goodwill, has lively themes full of coloraturas.[49]~~

Notes

~~Appears this section survived the unfortunate purging of the angel sonata.~~
no more --Gerda Arendt (talk) 19:00, 5 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

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