Talk:Un-American Graffiti/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Miyagawa (talk · contribs) 18:03, 27 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Plot section doesn't include the typical actor in brackets format following the first appearance of the character.
"She stakes out the restaurant before the owner’s husband comes out and berates her to leave." - This reads as if it is referencing the owner's wife from the previous sentence.
"appear and shoot paintballs at the three." - The previous sentence (in the above bullet) makes it sounds as if there would be only two people there.
Production - Adam Rose doesn't have a closing bracket.
Production - You've got Postgame Mortem linked twice in the same section.
IGN's "good" quote needs an immediate citation.
Reviews - You've got cliché linked on the second occurrence.
"even Veronica pointing out this cliché didn't make it less so." - needs a cite
"a breath of fresh air," - same
Glad you mentioned the Islamophobia part, I was wondering if that was worth linking to from within the plot, but I'm satisfied with it here.
Enrico Colantoni shouldn't be linked to in the image caption as he's already linked to in the article body.

@Johanna: Other than that, I think it's good to go. Nice job. Shame that FBI season never panned out, I've seen the trailer and it would have been good - especially since that sort of procedural seems to be popular. Miyagawa (talk) 11:36, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Miyagawa: Yeah, I know, but I would have been happy with it returning in any form! :) Anyways, I have responded to your comments, and once again, thank you for the review. Johanna^{(talk to me!)} 16:32, 31 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]