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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 6 September 2018 and 13 December 2018. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Sassydeelight.

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Hi! Your article is great! You covered everything and have given every section equal weight and importance. --There are some run-on sentences in the first section that you may want to look at. Maybe try:

Original: Uchee Billy or Yuchi Billy (unknown–November 25, 1837 St. Augustine, Fla.) was a chief of the Yuchi tribe who along with his band escaped forced relocation from Georgia to Indian Territory by moving to the area of what is now Volusia County, Florida in 1822. During the Second Seminole War Uchee Billy was an ally of the Seminoles, and was one of the principal war chiefs who fought the U.S. Army.

My edit: Uchee Billy or Yuchi Billy (unknown–November 25, 1837 St. Augustine, Fla.) was a chief of the Yuchi tribe, who along with his band escaped forced relocation from Georgia to Indian Territory by moving to the area of what is now Volusia County, Florida in 1822. During the Second Seminole War, Uchee Billy was an ally of the Seminoles, and was one of the principal war chiefs who fought the U.S. Army.

There are also some places in this section that can use commas! Also, you should specify which fort he died in because it is a new section.

Original: He died in the fort on November 25, 1837 in prison in St. Augustine, Florida. After his death his skull was defleshed by the attending physician Frederick Weedon from St. Augustine who kept it as a macabre curio. Weedon was also the attending physician for Osceola, whom he decapitated after his death at Fort Moultrie in South Carolina, and kept his head in a jar of preservative.

My edit: He died in the fort on November 25, 1837 in prison in St. Augustine, Florida. After his death, his skull was defleshed by the attending physician Frederick Weedon from St. Augustine, who kept it as a macabre curio. Weedon was also the attending physician for Osceola, whom he decapitated after his death at Fort Moultrie in South Carolina, and kept his head in a jar of preservative.

Ttaneva (talk) 18:35, 5 November 2018 (UTC) Tanya[reply]

You can make those changes yourself. All constructive edits are welcome. - Donald Albury 19:05, 5 November 2018 (UTC)[reply]