Talk:USS Solomons/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 20:54, 5 September 2021 (UTC)
Comments
- Feels that the lead is a little light for this article, consider beefing up the existing para.
- "and the amount of Bofors" the number of
- "Washington under" comma after Washington.
- "under lend-lease" our article seems to call this Lend-Lease, a formal title for that policy.
- "Navy.. As a " one too many full stops.
- Check image captions. They mainly seem to be fragments, not sentences, so they don't need a full stop.
- "Virginia on 16" comma after Virginia.
- "without much luck" not particularly encyclopedic tone.
- "BuNo 24295" what is that?
- "Lt. Cdr. H." this rank is abbreviated, no others seem to be.
- What is LTJG?
- And FKpt. ?
- "Martin PBM Mariner flying boat that" flying boat is overlinked.
- "External links" fix font size.
That's all I have right now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 08:38, 6 September 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I've addressed your points. Stikkyy t/c 05:56, 8 September 2021 (UTC)