Talk:USS Savo Island/GA1

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 08:56, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Could you action the relevant comments from Talk:USS Admiralty Islands/GA1 and Talk:USS Bougainville (CVE-100)/GA1. Once that is done, I'll take a look. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:59, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: Done Stikkyy t/c 17:21, 17 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:37, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

This article is in good shape. I have a few comments:

forth→fourth in the lead, but in the body it says twenty-third?
suggest "fought ~~in support~~as part of the Guadalcanal campaign"
launchedin
say what Operation Magic Carpet was
her wl isn't in the body
link=on for the power conversion to link kW
the install~~ment~~ation
Bofors 40-millimeters (1.6 in) anti-aircraft guns, by adj=on in the conversion
20-mm and 40-mm
link Clarence Ekstrom and add to the infobox as a notable commander
3rd Fleet? I thought US fleets were spelled ou, ie Third Fleet? Also 7th
"island of Peleliu~~, of~~in the Palau Islands"
say where Manus Island is
"She, accompanied ~~with~~by eighteen"
link capital ship
~~Admiral~~ Kurita
say Kossol Roads is at Palau
the landing crafts
suggest "sinking Savo Island's sister Ommaney Bay"
suggest "Savo Island's sister Manila Bay
plane ~~being~~began trailing
say Ulithi is in the Caroline Islands
suggest "Savo Island's sister Kitkun Bay
suggest "along with her sisters Marcus Island and Saginaw Bay"
suggest "traded for her sister Makin Island's"
^Ooccupation of Japan
link "Operation Magic Carpet" where you first use "Magic Carpet" in the body
use the link for Boston Harbor, then link Boston when you get to "Boston group"
suggest adding that Clarence Ekstrom was awarded the Navy Cross for his extraordinary heroism and distinguished service in command of the ship during the Battle of Leyte Gulf
Rielly is unused
ShipbuildingHistory.com and Hazegray.org are marginally acceptable at GA, but I wouldn't be relying on them at Milhist ACR or FAC

That's all I have, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:37, 18 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Peacemaker67: I've addressed your points, apart from the fact that ship infoboxes appear to not have a parameter for listing commanders. Stikkyy t/c 22:08, 19 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

My mistake, I've asked at the template talk page. This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 04:07, 20 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]