Talk:USS Missouri (BB-11)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 22:00, 13 July 2015 (UTC)

I'll have this done soon JAGUAR  22:00, 13 July 2015 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Initial comments

• The lead summarises the article well, I was initially going to suggest re-phrasing the opening sentence but I dropped it after discovering the structure was used in various other battleship GAs
• "the Atlantic Fleet circumnavigated the globe as the so-called Great White Fleet" - why 'so-called'? Was the Great White Fleet the official name? I haven't seen anything otherwise in other articles
  • The "Great White Fleet" was just a nickname for the fleet.
• "She served briefly as a troopship in 1919, carrying American soldiers back from France, before being decommissioned in September" - she was decommissioned in September of 1919? If so it would be better as before being decommissioned the following September or September later that year
  • How about just "that year"?
• "She had a crew of 561 officers and enlisted men, which increased to 779–813" - did the crew increase during the war?
  • Don't know for sure, but I'd assume so - Conway's doesn't say.
• "The conning tower had 10 in (250 mm) thick sides" - in this instance it should be written as "inch"
  • Done
• "She steamed out of Norfolk" - wrong Norfolk!
  • I did that in another article too!

On hold

Very minor stuff. Once again this is a well-written article with few issues to bring up. Initially the review was longer as I suggested a re-phrase of the opening sentence, but I realised it didn't matter. Once they're all addressed this will become another GA JAGUAR  22:27, 13 July 2015 (UTC)

Thanks again Jaguar! Parsecboy (talk) 11:49, 15 July 2015 (UTC)

Thanks for addressing them, this is good to go JAGUAR  16:16, 15 July 2015 (UTC)