Talk:USS Kentucky (BB-6)/GA2
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Reviewer: RightCowLeftCoast (talk · contribs) 07:21, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
With a little work, this article can look forward to being listed as a GA quality article. Please see my suggestions below.
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Issues appear to be resolved.
Although the are many spelling/grammer issues that I can see, I would like to suggest that the following text be looked at:
*Consider changing "Her keel was laid down by the Newport News Shipbuilding Company of Virginia, on 30 June 1896." to read "The Newport News Shipbuilding Company of Virginia laid down her keel, on 30 June 1896." This is for reduction of passive voice.
*Add a comma after "Between 1901 and 1904" and "and from 1904 to 1907"
*Add a comma after "In 1907"
*Change till to until after "From 1917"
*Add a comma after "In 1902"
*Add a comma after "In November"; also of what year?
*Add a comma after "On 20 August"
*Add a comma after "On 11 September"
*Add a comma after "On 4 June 1912"
*Change till to until after "From July"
*Add a comma after "From July till September"
*Add a comma after "During the war"
*Add a comma after "On 18 March 1919"
*Replace "as a result" with "because" after "The Kentucky was decommissioning on 29 May 1920,"
*Capitalize "her" in the sentence "her name was struck from..."
- Issues appear to be resolved.
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- No issues observed
- a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- No issues observed
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- No issues observed
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit war or content disputes observed
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Issues resolved
Although not required, I suggest alt captions be added to the article (though not a requirement of GAN
- Issues resolved
- a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- On hold until improvements are made as suggested above, or good reason given not to make the above suggestions. If a reply, or improvements are not made by 23 May 2013, I will close this GAN.
- Pass/Fail:
- Thanks for the review. The issues you noted with the prose should be fixed. As far as alt text, it seems to me that all of the images have alt text already. Did I miss an image, or is the alt text not good? Inkbug (talk) 07:51, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
- Almost all the issues have been resolved, that I listed. There is still one on the list that was overlooked. As for alt descriptions, I did not see an alt specifically tagged for the image in the "Great White Fleet" section, or for the image used in the infobox at the top of the page.
- I also saw that since I began the GAN that additional improvements to the article have been made. Good.
- Almost there.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 17:38, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
- Everything should be fixed. Thanks, Inkbug (talk) 19:11, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
- Having rechecked the article, everything appears to be in order for the current version, as checked against GA criteria. I shall make the proper changes to the talk page and article shortly. Congratulations to Inkbug for their efforts in improving this article.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 20:13, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
- Thank you! Inkbug (talk) 05:02, 10 May 2013 (UTC)
- Having rechecked the article, everything appears to be in order for the current version, as checked against GA criteria. I shall make the proper changes to the talk page and article shortly. Congratulations to Inkbug for their efforts in improving this article.--RightCowLeftCoast (talk) 20:13, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
- Everything should be fixed. Thanks, Inkbug (talk) 19:11, 9 May 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for the review. The issues you noted with the prose should be fixed. As far as alt text, it seems to me that all of the images have alt text already. Did I miss an image, or is the alt text not good? Inkbug (talk) 07:51, 9 May 2013 (UTC)