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Reviewer: Sturmvogel 66 (talk · contribs) 15:25, 19 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]


I'll get to this shortly.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 15:25, 19 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]

  • Fix the DAB in the first sentence of the design section; or just get rid of the redundant link.
    • Fixed
  • External links OK.
  • Can we get a file or ID number for that great photo, File:USS Indiana (BB-58) 1942.jpg?
    • Hmm, I can't find it on the NHHC website and Navsource doesn't have one
  • File:USS Indiana (BB-58) - 80-G-342732.tiff would not load
    • Works for me - weird.
  • Link standard and full load in the info box
    • Done
  • Link 1st and 2nd London treaties, broaden the displaced link to go to standard displacement and add one to full load.
    • Done
  • Down to armament, more later.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 00:17, 26 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Fix the rounding error in the lede and in armor para as well as the excess precision for 17.3 inch barbettes. The conversion for the conning tower is redundant.
    • Think I've got these all
  • Convert .50-caliber and be sure to explain how it's different than caliber length
    • Done
  • Make sure that the infobox weapons totals match the armament para
    • Done
  • hyphenate Triple gun, fire control, surface search, air search if you chose to keep it as there's an article on early-warning radar.
    • Done
  • Add links to search radar, fire-control radar, Majuro
    • Done
  • Pretty sure that the Mk 3, 4, 12/22 radars were mounted on the Mk 37 directors, not the conning tower
    • Will need to check Friedman on this
  • Link battery (artillery) in the lede and add links to secondary battery and main battery
    • Done
  • Was the captain relieved when Indiana and Washington collided?
    • Not that DANFS says
  • Tell the reader where Seeadler Harbor is and the same for Ponpei
    • Done
  • When was she transferred to TG 34?
    • DANFS doesn't give specific details, but Halsey and 3rd Fleet took command of the FCTF four days before, though I don't know how immediate the unit re-numberings was.
      • I can tell that you really haven't researched her role during the Marianas, since I just had to do that for Hornet, and what you have is OK, but what I was wondering was more when she was transferred from TU 58.7.3 to TF 34 rather than the renumbering from 5th to 3rd Fleet.--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:25, 29 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • More later--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 16:16, 29 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
  • Not sure that non-military types will understand "check her fire". Perhaps "cease fire"?
    • Done
  • Link sortie
    • Done
  • Japanese air attacks or kamikaze attacks?
    • Both were bombed - but regardless, kamikazes are air attacks :P
  • battleship Yamato but they and 15 April but did and in 1966 but her commas needed
    • Done
  • Tell the reader that the A6M is a Zero and that both the A6M and the Ki-43 are fighters. Double-check for other instances where you haven't identified the aircraft types.
    • I think those were the only two
  • Are there links to the Japanese steel companies?
    • Not that I'm aware of
  • August, part of missing word--Sturmvogel 66 (talk) 23:25, 29 April 2019 (UTC)[reply]
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