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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]


Will take this one. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 00:44, 8 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

  • Lead and infobox;
    • She was also the third Navy ship named for "after" the city of Cincinnati
      • fixed
    • Link Ohia, Atlantic Fleet, Pacific Fleet, Mediterranean
      • Didn't link Ohio since it's already linked in Cincinnati and I've been told that would be overlinking. But I will if you want.
    • from 1928–1932 -> from 1928 to 1932
      • fixed
    • Be consistent of mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic", "South Atlantic"
      • Hopefully I caught them all and fixed.
    • A comma after "After the war"
      • fixed
    • she was quickly deemed surplus
      • fixed
    • Per WP:INFOBOXUSE, flag icons and thumbnails must be avoided in infobox.
  • Section 1;
    • to be built by Todd Dry Dock & Construction Co., Tacoma, Washington,[5] "on" 27 August 1917
      • fixed
    • and launched on 23 May 1921,[3] the cruiser was sponsored by Mrs. Charles E. Tudor; I think it is better to break this sentence
      • fixed
    • Her keel was laid on 15 May 1920, and "the ship was" launched on 23 May 1921
      • fixed
    • and "was" commissioned "on" 1 January 1924
      • fixed
    • having been designated by the Honorable John Galvin; what does this mean?
      • He designated who the sponsor would be. I can remove it if it is too confusing.
    • and commissioned 1 January 1924, Captain Charles P. Nelson in command; start this as a new sentence and as "The ship was commissioned on 1 January 1924 with Captain Charles P. Nelson in command.
      • fixed
    • Use full forms of the units on their first mention
      • fixed
    • Originally she was to mount "be mounted by" ten 6-inch (150 mm)/53 caliber guns
      • fixed
    • above-water, torpedo tube mounts for 21-inch (533 mm) torpedoes; no need of comma
      • fixed
    • Please be consistent on using the conversion template; "21-inch (533 mm)" "three inches (76 mm)"
      • Not real sure what you mean but I removed the second conversion because it had already been converted in the previous paragraph.
    • against muzzle blast and splinter damage.[4] [7] Fix the space
      • fixed
  • Section 1.1;
    • Some of these changes were save "to reduce" weight
    • fixed
    • these didn't prove "to be" reliable
      • fixed
    • Its also reported that Cincinnati mounted a pair of Army 40mm Bofors guns also; check the usage of "also", replace "mounted a" with "was mounted by a"
      • Reworded, hopefully fixed.
  • Section 2.1; all good
    • Yay
  • Section 2.2;
    • After only a "an" year in the Pacific"," Cincinnati returned to the Atlantic
      • fixed
    • A comma after "After the United States joined the war"
      • fixed
    • Fix the space; searching for German blockade runners .[6]
      • fixed
    • Fix the space; before she sank. [6]
      • fixed
    • from March 1944 until "to" July 1944
      • fixed
    • Consistency on mentioning the directions; "western Atlantic" "South Atlantic"
      • fixed
  • References needed for sections 3 & 4
    • Added proper reference.
  • Images OK, no plagiarism found
Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 11:18, 17 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
  2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
  3. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects): b (focused):
  4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:
  6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
  7. Overall:
    Pass/Fail:
    Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk • mail) 13:18, 19 November 2017 (UTC)[reply]