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Reviewer: Tomobe03 (talk · contribs) 10:37, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
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General comments:
- The article links to three DAB pages: Fuel economy, Bulkhead and Draught (nautical) - the last one being a redirect to Draft DAB. Please adjust to correct targets.
- External links are fine (no action needed).
- No overlinking observed.
Images:
- No problems whatsoever - licenses check out, captions are fine.
References:
- No referencing problems either.
Stability/comprehensiveness/focus:
- Criteria met.--Tomobe03 (talk) 20:00, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
Prose review:
- Is the first name of W. Brown, Jr unknown or is there another reason for use of the initial only?
- First name is unknown as far as sources go. —Ed!(talk) 14:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- In that case, it is possible that the redlink is not warranted, but that is not for the GAR.
- First name is unknown as far as sources go. —Ed!(talk) 14:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
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At 08:30, she altered course to pursue a sound ping on her sonar.
, I assume that's half past eight in the morning. Perhaps "am" (or "pm") designation would dispel doubts that readers may have regarding this matter?- Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 14:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
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The torpedo struck between framed 18 and 24 at about 4 feet (1.2 m) below her water line.
, I suspect that should be "frames" but I'm not familiar with ship construction, so I'm leaving it for you to correct me or that word.- You're right. Fixed. —Ed!(talk) 14:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
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She was also fitted with newer weapons and electronics systems.
what were those electronic systems? Just asking out of curiosity.--Tomobe03 (talk) 20:59, 11 May 2013 (UTC)- A newer radar. Added that. —Ed!(talk) 14:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
Since I found no disagreements with the MOS, i think there are no further issues to address except those already stated.--Tomobe03 (talk) 21:01, 11 May 2013 (UTC)
- Thanks for your review! —Ed!(talk) 14:50, 12 May 2013 (UTC)
- You are welcome. It was a pleasure and made an interesting reading material. Happy to pass this GAN.--Tomobe03 (talk) 15:03, 12 May 2013 (UTC)