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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:24, 19 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]


Comments

  • "from Dhaka, Bangladesh to Kathmandu, Nepal that" commas after country names per MOS:GEOCOMMA.
    Done.
  • Probably needs to note in the first sentence that it crashed "on landing".
    Done.
  • "and the deadliest accident involving " repeats "accident" in the same sentence, any hope for replacing the second with "incident" for instance?
    Done.
  • " pilot disorientation and a loss of situational awareness on the part of the pilots" again, pilot repeated here, could refactor to say it just once, e.g. by simply dropping the first "pilot".
    I wanted to make it clear that the pilots were the ones disoriented and had lost situational awareness, so I replaced the second use with "flight crew".
  • "The flight was a regularly scheduled flight that operates ..." flight repeated unnecessarily and present tense here, it is still the same flight number operating the same schedule?
    Changed the wording and changed to past tense
  • "high traffic " volumes of?
    Done.
  • "2 nautical miles away" convert etc.
    Done.
  • "right hand main wheels" right-hand would normally be hyphenated in this use.
    Done.
  • "65 adult passengers, two children, and four crew members, for a total of 71 " per MOSNUM, spell out, or enumerate, comparable figures, so 65/2/4/71 or sixty-five/two/four/seventy-one.
    Done.
  • "51 passengers and crew ... " avoid starting sentences with a number.
    I haven't heard of that one. I changed the start of the sentence to "There were..." but my old English teacher would cringe about that.
  • "20 passengers survived..." likewise.
    Same.
  • "pilot.[12][1] " refs in numerical order.
    Done.
  • "it over 100 times" more than.
    Done.
  • "He had resigned from the airline before the..." any reason given?
    It was explained later in the article in the Investigation section; there were rumors that he had had an extramarital affair with one of his trainees; that was one of the explanations of why the pilot was so out of his mind. He explained to his co-pilot that he was extremely sleep deprived as a result of the accusations.
  • "day.[10][1](p15)" numerical order.
    Done.
  • "her head.[16][1](p15)" ditto.
    Done.
  • "As of March 2019..." is it still the case?
    I haven't found anything newer than that reference to confirm.
  • "22 passengers survived " avoid starting sentences with a number.
    Done.
  • "to area hospitals" is an "area hospital" the same as a "local hospital"?
    Done.
  • " impact.[5][1](p16)" numerical order.
    Done.
  • " for identifying" -> "to identify".
    Done.
  • "Dash 8-Q400" I think that's the first time you put a hyphen between the 8 and Q400.
    Done.
  • "indefinite period of time" "of time" is unnecessary.
    Done.
  • Any update on if the airline can fly to Kathmandu now?
    I had done a lot of digging to see if there was any sources about that, to find if there had ever been a formal application, denial, or approval, but could never track anything down when I was working on this in May. As of today, the airline's website doesn't list Kathmandu as a destination, so I assume not.
  • " Kathmandu Post " should be in italics.
    Done.

That's everything I can find on a quick run through, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 20:41, 20 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for looking at it. I've made some changes outlined above. RecycledPixels (talk) 01:13, 21 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]
You're welcome, it was another interesting read. Your changes are great and I'm promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Staying alive since 2005!) 18:24, 21 September 2019 (UTC)[reply]