Talk:Typhoon Sally (1964)/GA1

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Reviewer: Yellow Evan (talk · contribs) 16:17, 18 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Going to take this. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 16:17, 18 November 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hurricanehink, since Yellow Evan is inactive recently, I would like you to consider picking this up for review instead. We are done with Cyclone Ava, so we are free to move on to the next one which is this. SMB9 9thx my edits! 17:41, 20 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

This isn't how this works at least formally. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 18:09, 20 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"With Sally's high intensity on approach, its impacts on Hong Kong were feared to be even worse than Typhoon Ruby, which had struck the region less than a week prior; 10,000 people were evacuated ahead of the storm and transportation services shut down." this is like a little awkward and wordy, the more I think about it. Change to "Due to fears of a repeat of Typhoon Ruby, which struck the region less than a week prior, 10,000 people were evacuated ahead of the storm". Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done SMB9 9thx my edits! 03:54, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

The only mentions of a damage total in the infobox are $115K on Guam and $750K in property damage. Yet the infobox notes $1.365 million (which seems too specific, I usually round infobox damages to 3 sig figs). Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane

Done. Added information, and rounded it into 1.37 (3 sig figs) SMB9 9thx my edits! 06:33, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

You mention 10 deaths as a TC in the infobox but only mention 9 in the lead. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done. Added information about that one person in the lead. SMB9 9thx my edits! 03:54, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

You mentioned 417 dead or missing in South Korea yet the infobox mentions at least 211. Why? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done Fixed these numbers in the lead. SMB9 9thx my edits! 06:33, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Spell out JTWC and JMA on first mention in the prose. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done. SMB9 9thx my edits! 03:54, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"total damage toll" what is this? a road? Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done Farm crops. SMB9 9thx my edits! 06:10, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

"Typhoon signal no. 2" link to tropical cyclone warnings and watches, which IIRC discusses this. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Done. SMB9 9thx my edits! 03:54, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Otherwise, it's good. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 22:34, 23 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]

@Yellow Evan:

Done! Everything is done! SMB9 9thx my edits! 06:33, 24 December 2020 (UTC)[reply]