Talk:Typhoon Judy (1982)/GA1

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 16:56, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hello User:Yellow Evan, I will be reviewing this article for GA. In other words, I will Judge Judy. :P --12george1 (talk) 16:56, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Forming east of the Philippines in tandem with another system on September 4, the disturbance continued to intensify, and was upgraded into a tropical storm early on September 6 and a typhoon on September 8, designated as Judy while tracking northwestward." - First of all, this entire thing is a run-on sentence; it is too long and there are several events. Here is my suggestion: "Forming east of the Philippines in tandem with another system on September 4, the disturbance continued to intensify, and was upgraded into a tropical storm early on September 6. Two days later, it became a typhoon and was designated as Judy while tracking northwestward." Next, the infobox says that the system developed on September 5, so that or the sentence is wrong.
- Your solution technically does not work since Judy was named when it became a TS, not tyhpoon, but I removed the designated as Judy part. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Thereafter, increased wind shear took toll on the typhoon," ---> "Thereafter, increased wind shear took a toll on the typhoon,"
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Judy became an extratropical cyclone almost immediately thereafter." - This isn't really a big deal, but you could have just formatted the sentence like this: "Judy became an extratropical cyclone almost immediately thereafter."
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Across Japan, a total of 26 people were killed, eight were rendered as missing, and 86 were injured." - I think you should write "eight others were rendered as missing", because the way the sentence is currently written, it seems like the eight people missing were presumed to have died.
- Good call, done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Two tropical disturbances soon developed, the first of which later spawned Typhoon Irving." - I don't think the word "later" is necessary, as Irving developed before Judy, right?
- Sorta, but it's a kinda tricky issue with the JMA/JTWC madness. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Following an increase in organized thunderstorm activity near the center," - Wikilink "thunderstorm activity" to atmospheric convection
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"equivalent to a mid-level Category 2 hurricane on the United States Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Wind Scale.[2]" - I'm not exactly sure you can say it like that. The agencies that use the SSHWS are based in the United States, but storms classified on the scale impact many other countries too. Maybe you could say "equivalent to a mid-level Category 2 hurricane on the National Oceanic and Atmospheric Administration's Saffir-Simpson Hurricane Wind Scale. ?
- You could. I copied this phrasing from JR :P I put United-States based as I've done on other article. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Shortly after its peak, cool air began to take toll on the system as it ingested the remnants of he TUTT." - There is both a missing word and typo here. "Shortly after its peak, cool air began to take a toll on the system as it ingested the remnants of the TUTT."
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
"Judy moved onshore at Omezaki Point on Honshu,[2] despite still producing hurricane-force winds.[4]" - Why is the word "despite" there? Is it unusual for a system of that strengthen to strike Japan?
- Give the storm's peak intensity, it's semi-unusual. It's sorta like a storm hitting NC in the USA. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
On reference #1, the author should be changed from " Padua, Michael V." to "Michael V. Padua"
- Done. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:09, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
That should be it for now. Possibly more stuff later.--12george1 (talk) 16:56, 6 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
- Thank you for the review GC. Y E ^Pacific ^Hurricane 04:10, 7 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]
Nothing else left to fix. Therefore, I will pass this article and list it as a GA. Regards, --12george1 (talk) 20:00, 9 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]