Talk:Typhoon Hester (1971)/GA1

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 22:35, 11 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this one.

Does "most destructive" mean most damaging? As in monetary? Or in terms of people affected? Houses damaged?
- This wasn't specified in the source. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
There is no "Palau Island". It's an archipelago and a country.
- Changed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Why no JMA winds in the infobox? Or are those winds merely converted from the JTWC, since there was no JTWC then?
- JMA database does not list winds prior to 1977, only pressure and whether or not the system was tropical or extratropical. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The most significant impact from Typhoon Hester was felt in South Vietnam were winds in excess of 155 km/h (100 mph) caused extensive damage to several United States Army bases." - I'm assuming where, not were. And a comma would be nice.
- Psh, commas... Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"On October 18, 1971" - year redundant
- *grumbles* some tell me to keep it, others to remove it.... Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Philippines.[1] Due to the cyclone's proximity to the Philippines, the Philippine" - can you change one of the first two (maybe the 2nd one) so there aren't so many Philippines' usage in a row?
- You get a Philippines! And you get a Philippines! And you get a Philippines! EVERYBODY gets a Philippines!! (that sounds worse in retrospect) Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Is there any meteorological info? Like why it moved, or strengthened? Anything in the monthly weather report for October 71?
- There's not much. I put everything I could in. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Regarded as one of the most destructive storms to strike Vietnam in several decades" - you should say 1944, since you say that in the lede.
- Switched Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"Typhoon Hester caused considerable damage in the country" - you should be careful, since in the lede you're careful to mention South Vietnam, whereas the beginning of the impact section refers to Vietnam as a whole. You should probably clarify more about South Vietnam in the impact section.
- Changed the section to South Vietnam since there's only one line on North. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
You never indicate of the damage total is 1971 USD or not.
- Added Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"The 91st Evacuation Hospital was mostly destroyed and forced to transfer patients to Quy Nhơn" - I'd add another "was" before "forced"
- Added Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"the entire banana, rice, and sugar cane crop was destroyed and harvests could not be made until the following Spring" - entire, nationwide? And does spring have to be capitalized?
- Source doesn't specify the region in which the crop was lost but it's not assumed to be the entire country. Most likely in the five most affected provinces (but that's OR and we can't be doing that...). Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
" the 1,000 ton Union Pacific ran aground" - was that a freighter or something?
- Probably, source didn't specify and a quick Google search yielded nothing helpful. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"leaving an estimated 200,000 people were left homeless" - get rid of "were left"
- But...but...Emphasis!!! (fixed) Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

That's it! --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 22:35, 11 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I got everything! Thanks for the review Hink! Cyclonebiskit (talk) 13:17, 12 April 2013 (UTC)[reply]

"As a USAF radar operator at DaNang when this hit, we clocked winds at 165mpg on top of the mountain. Tracking was supposed have it centered on Chu Lai. Instead, it took a turn overnight and centered on DaNang, a city built for 40,000 with over 400,000 people. There was tremendous damage also at DaNang. Also, the Armed Forces television site near our radar site on the mountain was totally destroyed" — Preceding unsigned comment added by 96.18.203.77 (talk) 23:29, 21 September 2015 (UTC)[reply]