Talk:Typhoon Hester (1952)/GA1
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk · contribs) 16:41, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
Another typhoon -- fun will be had by all. Courcelles (talk) 16:41, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
- Marshall Islands or the Marshall Islands? I've always heard it with the definite article?
- I think it's the latter, and I changed it to that.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 21:14, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
- Do you really mean to link Micronesia? Or the modern day Federated States of Micronesia? "In the sentence The storm began to rapidly intensify, as it moved north of Micronesia.")
- Changed it to Caroline Islands instead.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 21:14, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
- "Hester began to curve eastward and began to weaken rapidly." Try to avoid using "began" twice in one sentence.
- "The Navy estimated" Spell out which navy you mean.
- Non-fatal injuries are also casualties, so you have the wrong word in "Overall, eighteen people were injured on Enewetak, and there were no casualties." You mean no fatalities.
- Next sentence needs to start with a "The"
- "Hester past south of Guam" Hester passed.
Courcelles (talk) 16:54, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
- @Courcelles: Once again, thanks for the review.Nova Crystallis (Talk) 21:14, 24 April 2018 (UTC)
- Two minor changes made myself, and promoted. Courcelles (talk) 21:19, 24 April 2018 (UTC)