Talk:Typhoon Choi-wan (2009)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:45, 8 January 2010 (UTC) Overall this article is good, though I did find a few concerns:[reply]

The first paragraph is quite long; split it.
The first sentence of the lead should explain what it is, exactly. It just dives right into the information about the typhoon.
"Later that day the island of Agrihan was placed under a Tropical Storm Watch, before early the next day along with Tinian and Saipan, the tropical storm watches were upgraded to a Typhoon watch" I see what you're saying, but confusing as written. Reword.
Define "navtex area".
I gave the article a copyedit; read through again and make sure there's no other grammatical/spelling/punctuation errors. Especially double check comma usage, as I found many problems with that.

I'll put the article on hold, and will pass it when this is fixed. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 15:45, 8 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

I've gotten most of the issues with the article. I have yet to give the meteorological history a good read through due to lack of time. I should be able to polish it up later today. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 17:32, 8 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Since the other issues are done, and most of the article at least has been copyedited (caught a typo in the ce, lol), I am willing to pass the article now as it is, though you're certainly welcome to do a bit more copyediting on it if you find anything else. Wizardman _{Operation Big Bear} 04:21, 10 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]