Talk:Typhoon Chanchu/GA1
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Reviewer: Juliancolton (talk · contribs) 04:01, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
Great work on this. At first glance, it looks like you have a nice variety of sources, and the illustrations seem useful and relevant. For a hypothetical FAC, File:Affected Philippine provinces by typhoon Chanchu 2006.PNG would probably need some kind of source in the file description page, and the source info for File:Typhoon Pearl in Shantou.jpg is a bit dubious, but at this stage I can let those things slide. Some comments on the content:
- An area of convection, or thunderstorms, persisted on May 5 about 555 km (355 mi) southeast of... - 555 km seems a bit specific for an area of disorganized thunderstorms, and kind of implies that it already had a well-defined center of circulation (not sure that's what you want to convey).
- By contrast, the JMA only intensified into a severe tropical storm with winds of 95 km/h (60 mph). - I hate when my agencies fail to intensify. ;) Normally I'd fix something like this myself, but I'm not sure how you meant to word it.
- Vietnamese fishermen in the South China Sea received 24 hours of warning from the national meteorology agency - I might have missed it, but do you know what the agency is called?
- A ferry with 700 people aboard went missing, but the Coast Guard found it ashore. - this is a bit of a cliff-hanger. Does this mean it wrecked? What happened to all 700 ppl?
- having struck the country 44 days earlier than normal. - does this refer to an average date of first impact? That's not immediately clear, if so.
- the typhoon forced 43 factories to close - temporarily?
That's about it! I've also done some minor editing myself, so take a look and make sure I haven't inadvertently changed the meaning of any text. After you've addressed my few questions above, I'll take one final look and surely pass the article. – Juliancolton | Talk 04:01, 16 July 2014 (UTC)
- Looks like everything's been taken care of (that was fast!). Passing. – Juliancolton | Talk 04:35, 16 July 2014 (UTC)