Talk:Typhoon Amy (1951)/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 16:58, 15 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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"struck areas of the central Philippines in December 1951. Striking the" repetitive use of strike.

Switched the second instance of 'striking' to 'impacting'.

Could link 1951 Pacific typhoon season in the lead.

Linked 'that year' to the suggested article.

"Amy was able to intensify to " -> "Amy intensified to"

Shortened and change to sentence structure suggested.

"In the Philippines, Amy was considered one of the worst typhoons to strike the island chain on record." but not considered that anywhere else? Seems a little odd.

What I meant to say that 'it was considered one of the worst to strike the Philippines' but it came out as saying that only in the Philippines was it considered the worst storm to strike the country. Fixed.

"estimated at ₱560 million." what is this equivalent to in dollars or pounds or euro?

Not sure, I can't find a historical currency converter that has figures from 1951. Perhaps there's a template or site that I'm unaware of that has exhcange values this far back?

Not sure either. Perhaps just spell out Philippine Peso rather than just rely on the link to the currency, in all honesty, at the resolution I read Wikipedia, I can barely make that crossed P out... The Rambling Man (talk) 18:43, 29 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Done – Fixed. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)} 18:55, 31 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox : 569 – 991 -> 569–991.

Removed extra spaces.

"Steady intensification followed afterwards, with the typhoon intensifying" repetitive use of intensify.

Changed the second repetition to 'reaching'

"In the South the China Sea on" is there a missing "of" here?

Well, I had placed 'the' instead of 'of', on accident, :P

"continuously erupt lava in a series of eruption events which continued" repetitive use of continue and erupt.

Removed 'continuously', changed 'erupt' to 'release'.

"The typhoon's affects" effects. Or "The typhoon affected the..."

Changed to the first suggestions.

"28 ships capsized due to winds caused by Amy, including seven" Either "Twenty-eight ... seven " or "28 ... 7" per MOS:NUM.

Went with 28, 7.

"two people were killed and 17 others" similar.

Went with two, seventeen.

Check ref titles for WP:DASH compliance e.g. ref 1 should have 1958–1959. And "History of the Joint Typhoon Warning Center – Up to 1998"

Checked, resolved issues in Reference 1 and 15.

You have several refs with accessdate but no URL so the access date field is not required.

Removed accessdates on book references.

Category:Typhoons is not required as you already have Category:Typhoons in the Philippines which is more refined.

Removed.

I'll put the nomination on hold for a week or so while these issues are resolved. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:09, 28 August 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have corrected the posted concerns. TheAustinMan^{(Talk·Works)}