Talk:Turning Point (2008 wrestling)/GA1

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Reviewer: Wizardman 05:42, 2 December 2009 (UTC) A nice article overall, though I do have a few issues:[reply]

"Sting then went on to defeat an alliance of Styles', Joe, at TNA's October PPV event Bound for Glory IV on October 12 after an assist from Nash," Do you mean an ally, or was there an alliance of unlisted persons somewhere?
- Looking back at it now, I did mean ally, but wrote alliance for some reason. I guess because I thought it sounded better. Fixed--WillC 06:19, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"Joe's rivalry with Nash also broke off from the storyline, however, the build to their encounter began long before the storyline's seeds ever sprouted." I think I get what you're saying, but needs to be reworded for clarity, namely around the middle.
- Yeah, I never liked that sentence. Just never could think of something that made it better and less fan-ish IMO. Rewrote the last part a little bit. Hopefully that helps.--WillC 06:19, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"In December 2007 at the previous Turning Point event," No reason not to use the exact date IMO.
- I agree, must've forgot it during expansion.--WillC 06:19, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
"This later made headlines on numerous wrestling sites, with it later becoming known this was scripted to occur, as TNA had asked for them to attend the event," It reads as if TNA knew of both ICP and Hall, though you state later they only know about the former. Reword.
- Small changes done, should change the follow to read better.--WillC 06:19, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]
Article could use a punctuation copyedit. For example, "Up next was Booker T's, defense of the TNA Legends Championship against Christian Cage with the added stipulation, that if Cage lost, he would be forced to join The Main Event Mafia." There's three punctuation errors just in that sentence (I fixed that one but there's a couple other sentences like that.)
- Sorry, didn't notice those. Honestly, I need to quit expanding at night when I'm bored haha. My work becomes sloppy. Thanks for noticing, I'll get right on them, I plan to nominate this for FA in the future, can't have those types of mistakes.--WillC 06:19, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I'll put the article on hold and will pass it when everything's fixed. Wizardman 05:42, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Looks good. I'll pass the article, trusting that the punctuation issues continue to be worked on. Wizardman 15:42, 2 December 2009 (UTC)[reply]