Talk:Truth (Gwen Stefani song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) ) 16:02, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

@Carbrera: I definitely have to grab this article for review. I should have my comments up in a couple days. :-) Aoba47 (talk) 16:02, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Change “a song by” to “a song recorded by” Done
Change “along with the rest of This What the Truth Feels Like” to “along with the rest of the album” as you do not need to repeat the album title again. Done
Be careful of repeating the same phrase or word in the same paragraph or sentence. You use “the track” numerous times so think of ways to vary the language. For instance, I would replace “The track’s production” with “Its production” as it is clear what you are referring to. Done
Again I would rephrase “the titular track for This What the Truth Feels Like” to “the album’s titular track”. I would also move it to being the second sentence in the paragraph and have the information about the release/production after it. Done
Remove “solely” as it is not necessary. Done
I am not sure “that encompasses a guitar hook” is necessarily the best way to describe the song. I would use either “with a guitar hook” or “that uses a guitar hook”. Done
Remove “and the events that follow” as it is unnecessary and repetitive. The phrase “the aftermath of a painful breakup” covers that already. Done
Rephrase the speculation about the song being about Blake to the following to be a little more concise: (Contemporary music critics speculated that the song, along with other material from the album, was inspired by Stefani’s romance with American singer and The Voice co-judge Blake Shelton. ”) You need to identify Blake Shelton as I have done in my suggestion. Done
You repeat the song title a lot in this lead (and the lead is relatively short so it is noticeable). Vary your language on how you refer to the song/single/it.
Remove “upon release” as that is assumed. Done
Rephrase the final sentence to (“Truth” received generally mixed reviews from critics, who commended the track’s lyrics, while some found it to be unmemorable.) to be a little more direct. Done

Background and recording

Remove “shortly after” as it is a somewhat awkward transition Done
The second “with them” in the sentence starting with “After agreeing” can be removed as it sounds somewhat awkward and repetitive. Done
I would specify “Stefani’s relationships with Gavin Rossdale and Blake Shelton” as “Stefani’s divorce from English musician Gavin Rossdale and new romance with Blake Shelton.” Keep the link to Gavin but remove it for Blake as he is linked multiple times already (in the lead and image caption). Done
I would rephrase the second sentence of the second paragraph to the following just to be a little clearer: (After starting her relationship with Shelton, Stefani stopped writing and recording songs about her divorce in favor of discussing more romantic and positive themes.) Done
Clarify what you mean by “the idea of writing became even easier for Stefani”. I would restructure that sentence to make it absolutely clear what was the moment that made it easier for her to record (This is important as it is the opposite of her initial recording experiences with “Baby Don’t Lie” and “Spark the Fire” where she frequently discussed having writer’s block) Done
Remove the comma after Rossdale Done
I am not sure if the final sentence is necessary as it is somewhat repetitive. I would rephrase it to the following: (Stefani has stated that "Truth" and the album was a “breakup record”.) and I would move it to being the second sentence of the second paragraph as I feel it makes more sense to say how the recording process was all about the divorce first and then transition into stuff about Shelton/the positive recording stuff. Done

Composition

I would separate the sentences with Kitty Empire and Spencer Kornhaber into two sentences as it reads somewhat awkwardly. Done
Otherwise, great work here!

Critical reception

Great work here; I can’t find anything to change.

Track listing

Remove this section as articles about album tracks do not have separate track listings unless the song was released independently in some way (either as a single or remix) Done

Credits and personnel

Great work here!

References

Great job with the references here! While not required for GAN, I always encourage archiving links wherever applicable to avoid dead/broken links and to preserve the article for the future.

Final comments

@Carbrera: You have done a lot of excellent work with this page, especially since the song was just released so I am very impressed. Most of my comments are just suggestions on how to better phrase or structure certain sentences and paragraphs and come from a more copyediting approach. This are more suggestions so feel free to disagree or provide any additional comments about them. Once all my suggestions are addressed in way or another, this should be an easy and quick pass. Aoba47 (talk) 20:45, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
- @Aoba47: Hey thanks so much! I changed everything you suggested! Thanks again for another wonderful review! :) Carbrera (talk) 22:26, 25 March 2016 (UTC)[reply]
  - @Carbrera: Thank you for your quick responses and I am glad that I could help in any way. You have done a lot of great work and again, I am very impressed with this page as the song is so recent. I look forward to reading and reviewing your future work. ✓ Pass

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail: