Talk:Troughman/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Moray An Par (talk) 06:10, 10 June 2011 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   I am not sure if his DOB doesn't follow MOS:BIO but wouldn't it be better if you'd write it in full "1950 or 1951" vs "1950/51"?

   Is it possible that we can list notable people doing the same practices (given it's rarity) in a "see also" section?

   Use an infobox.

   Who is Robert Reynolds? How is his commentary relevant to Troughman? Is he a columnist on a gay/gender magazine? A mainstream media icon/journalist?

   I think "it becomes easy to let myself go completely and, no longer kneeling or crouching, I lie right down in the urinal." should be in another sentence.

   I'd suggest linking Mardi Gras and Australian.

   External links on video coverage on him or related articles on him would be nice.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Ref 8 has a bare link. Consider using citation templates (though is not necessary; you can always do it manually). It makes things easier.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   This article is obviously short, which makes me doubt if he fulfills WP:GNG under "significant coverage"

   If he's really that famous, why isn't there any info on his birthplace, parents, childhood, education and so many other things?

   Expanding on "Part of the myth of Troughman included persistent rumours of death." may be beneficial to the article, and may be worth mentioning.

   Also on that sentence, it mentions "part of the myth of Troughman" without even discussing what are the myths surrounding him.

   What other watersports?

   Discussing the activity he is most known for outside the quote.

   What happened of him? Did he marry? Die? Where is he now? Did he have children? Is he now a gay rights activist? Has he been involved in any similar (or dissimilar) cause?

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Is the urinal necessary? Wouldn't a fair use picture of him do better? I'd assume that he has a picture on the internet given his "underground celebrity" status.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

I honestly believe that this article is lacking on very many key points. I'll put this on hold so that the established user who nominated this may find time to expand (with emphasis) this article. Moray An Par (talk) 10:36, 10 June 2011 (UTC)

Result

The nominator have been informed for quite sometime now, and this review have been already over a week. The nominator has expressed no interest in improving the article after this review. Hence, this nomination is failed. Moray An Par (talk) 07:18, 18 June 2011 (UTC)