Talk:Tropical Storm Soudelor (2009)/GA1

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• Soudelor remained disorganized for the duration of its existence. Later that day - A bit confusing, reword this if possible.

• Reworded Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• The final advisory was issued the following day after Soudelor made landfall in southern China. - What advisory? And from whom?

• Fixed

• In the Philippines, Soudelor produced severe flooding that killed one person and resulted in the issuance of a state of calamity. - Is a "state of calamity" an official declaration?

• Yes, it's like a state of emergency in the US Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• The storm later killed 15 people in southern China after 15 hikers were washed away in a flash flood on Hainan Island. - Redundancy: "killed 15 people after 15 hikers".

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• The Philippine Atmospheric, Geophysical and Astronomical Services Administration issued public storm signal one for nine regions of the Philippines upon the formation of the storm, all in the northern areas of the country. What is "public storm signal one"? Also, why not just "for nine regions of the northern Philippines"?

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• In Hong Kong under the influence of the outer rain bands of Soudelor, there were some squally showers reported during July 11. - Confusing. Why not simply "In Hong Kong, outer bands of Soudelor produced squally rain showers" or such?

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• There were also 20 reports of fallen trees within Hong Kong, with one falling into a mini bus terminal. - Any wind reports?

• Not that I could find Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• Officials evacuated 297 homes to higher grounds and reported that 977 were in threatened areas - 977 homes, or people?

• Elephants :P, yes people, fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• Roughly VND71 billion (US$3.98 million) was set aside by the Government of Vietnam to assist residents after natural disasters. - Is this relevant to the storm itself?

• Partially, it includes relief funds for areas affected by Soudelor. Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• The heavy rainfall was also recorded near Hanoi at 130 mm (5.1 in). - Poorly worded.

• Fixed Cyclonebiskit (talk) 14:14, 14 August 2009 (UTC)

• One person was killed after being swept away. - Where? In his home? In a vehicle?

• Neither, she was swept away while walking home

A good article all-in-all, just some areas that require clarification or tweaking. On-hold for now. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 19:30, 11 August 2009 (UTC)

Passed. –Juliancolton | ^Talk 15:22, 14 August 2009 (UTC)