Talk:Tropical Storm Olga (2019)/GA1

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 02:56, 7 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

The transition from the first to second sentence is rather abrupt. Something like "The storm began as..." would be helpful.
The first paragraph could probably be chopped down; after all, it's a paragraph that (mostly) summarizes a two-paragraph section, which isn't much of a summary.
Total damage along the path of the cyclone was estimated at $400 million. Is this anywhere in the body of the article?

Meteorological history

a general northeast course. — Should this be "northeastern course"?
However, since the boundary had not yet moved through Olga's circulation, it persisted as a tropical cyclone. — Is "it" supposed to refer to Olga, or to the boundary? Grammatically, it refers to the boundary.
over the southeastern Ontario province — Might want to rephrase. From an American context, saying "over the southeastern Michigan state" would seem pretty odd.

Preparations and impact

Flash flood watches encompassed nearly 8 million residents — Not sure "encompassed" is the right word? "were issued to nearly 8 million residents"? "Nearly 8 million residents were in areas with flash flood watches"?

Louisiana

The energy companies Entergy and Cleco reported damage to 150 and 35 power poles, respectively. An additional 260 power poles were impaired in New Orleans and Hammond. — So did Entergy and Cleco not operate in Hammond, or are the 150/35 numbers restricted to certain locations?
The Jazz Half marathon was also delayed. — For how long?
High winds temporarily damaged the perimeter fencing — Does "temporarily" mean that it was repaired? If so, I don't think you need that word.

Mississippi

"Corinth" is now a red link in the phrase "were recorded across Prentiss, Corinth, and Alcorn counties." It looks like that's because it's not a county at all, but rather a city in Alcorn county. --Usernameunique (talk) 20:46, 13 April 2020 (UTC)[reply]

worked to restore power to the WTVA and WLOV-TV transmitters. — Were those stations taken off the air by the storm?

Tennessee'

Elsewhere

Aftermath

Any other images that could be used here?
waster systems — waste systems? Water systems?
on the right-of-way — Does this mean the right side of the road?
The city of Okolona planned to ask that agency for funds as well. — Did it end up doing so?
penned U.S. President Donald Trump for — I think you mean "penned a request to U.S. President Donald Trump".
the Red Cross set up shelter to distribute — "set up a shelter"?

References

Do you happen to know which tool automatically adds archived URLs to each reference? I know there is one, but can't remember its name. That might be useful here, where some of the URLs are likely to go dead with time.

Overall