Talk:Tropical Storm Harvey (2011)/GA2

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Reviewer: Hurricanehink (talk · contribs) 01:50, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• Source for lede sentence?

• Done--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• "Landslides in the state of Chiapas damaged 36 homes and In Veracruz" - were you going with something else? Or was it just a typo putting "In" there?

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• You might wanna mention the two other deaths in Mexico unrelated to landslides, and try finding how they happened.

• Mentioned the two other deaths, but couldn't find out what happened.--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• "The National Hurricane Center (NHC) classified the system as an "invest" on August 11. " - we usually don't indicate this. Any reason you did? And it's not backed up by source.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• In general, can you cut down on the first MH paragraph? There's no need for that much info on a wave.

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• "A low-level circulation pattern subsequently became identifiable, and the developing center of circulation was tentatively pinpointed roughly 100 mi (160 km) east-northeast of Cape Gracias a Dios.[12] At 1800 UTC on August 18, the system was designated as Tropical Depression Eight" - oh god that first sentence. Please merge and simplify :D

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• "and found a well-defined center of circulation slightly northeast of where it was originally assumed to be. Observations from the flight yielded data that suggested the depression was only slightly below tropical storm status. With the new center location, forecasts were adjusted to allow for more time over water. As a result, more intensification than previously expected was possible. " - is any of this important?

• Guess not.--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• "remained on its westward course and was expected to move west-northwestward throughout its duration" - you could simplify by just saying "on its general westward course", since W vs. WNW is pretty marginal.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• "Continuing to deepen, Tropical Depression Eight was upgraded to Tropical Storm Harvey at 1200 UTC on August 19" - not true. Operationally, it was named at 1800 UTC. So either say it was upgraded to a tropical storm at 1200 UTC, or say when the NHC actually named it.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• " to move southwards, slowly." - "to move slowly southwards"?

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• Ref 15 does not cover that content listed

• I'm gonna remove that stuff--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• Any way you could cut down on the info in the eastern Caribbean? It wasn't technically Harvey, and it's not like the effects were that major.

• Better?--12george1 (talk) 03:09, 6 October 2013 (UTC)

• Unlike the above, the storm passed just offshore Honduras. Where is the impact in that country?
• "A "yellow alert" was declared for five departments of Honduras: Gracias a Dios, Colón, Atlantida, Cortés, and Islas de la Bahia. Two other departments, Yoro and Olancho." - what's with the last two?

• When I went to correct that, I noticed it was an epic fail. :P --12george1 (talk) 03:19, 9 October 2013 (UTC)

• "As a precautionary measure, shelters were prepared in case of an evacuation" - think you can cut the first four words.

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:19, 9 October 2013 (UTC)

• Any rainfall total for Belize?

• 3.4 inches in Belmopan--12george1 (talk) 16:51, 10 October 2013 (UTC)

• Have you used the WMO report? It might help for various countries.
• "isolated the town of Xaltianguis from surrounding areas" - the last three words aren't needed (implied by "isolated")

• Fixed--12george1 (talk) 03:19, 9 October 2013 (UTC)

• In general, it seems that most of the article was written in the days following the storm, without care for finding additional information. I'll leave this on hold for a few days, but it definitely needs some work. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:50, 6 October 2013 (UTC)