Talk:Tropical Storm Don (2011)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hylian Auree (talk · contribs) 04:00, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Note - I contributed to this article when it was in its prime. It has been revised entirely, and I haven't been involved with it since. Auree ★ 04:00, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice,fiction, and lists):

Prose is fine, just a few niggles:

"The combination of vertical wind shear and proximity to land impeded further development." Maybe "and the wave's proximity"?
"Early on July 26, the thunderstorms became more concentrated to the south of Cuba, in association with a low-pressure area." Can this be reworded so it's clearer that this has to do with the wave/precursor?
"The NHC predicted steady intensification to at least 65 mph (100 km/h) owing to generally favorable conditions including warm waters and light to moderate wind shear." Two things. 65 mph (100 km/h) what? And it reads like a run-on sentence.
Do we know when it made landfall? The bit succeeding that is very specific with the times and all, so it'd be nice to add it in.
"Late on July 27, the National Hurricane Center issued a tropical storm watch from Port Mansfield, Texas to San Luis Pass, Texas." Maybe removed the first ", Texas"?
"southwards", but "westward"?
Lots of unnecessary "the storm"s in the next paragraph ("from the storm", "for the storm", "ahead of the storm", etc.)
I made a quick copy-edit, please check the changes. Auree ★ 04:44, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

MoS compliance:

I don't think Atmospheric circulation is the right place to link to for surface circulation.

The new Tropical cyclone#structure link takes me nowhere in the tropical cyclone article. Did you mean to link to Tropical cyclone#Physical structure? Auree ★ 02:01, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Surely we can come up with a better title for the external link. :) Auree ★ 04:44, 15 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I meant that "Advisory Archive" alone is not descriptive enough (something like "The NHC's Advisory Archive for Tropical Storm Don" would be much more adequate). The section header should always be titled "External links", and the new external link to the TCR is redundant (already used in the refs). Auree ★ 02:01, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

I notice there's no See also section. While not required, most TC articles have this, so it'd be best to comply.

See also section goes before the Reference section. Auree ★ 02:01, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Not really a GA issue, but for optimal consistency, check for things like (over)linking to unnecessary things, style compliance (AmE/BrE, serial comma usage or not, etc.) and date/number conventions (I see things like 1200 km instead of 1,200 and both "2011-11-27" and "27 July 2011" in the refs).

There's one unnecessary link to Texas in the Preps/Impact section that I would like to see removed. Auree ★ 02:01, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
There are some dead links in the article right now due to the NHC's domain change; these can be fixed by adding "2011/" after the first "TWDAT" in the urls. The link to one news article has also gone dead. See here
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
As comprehensive as an article for such an uneventful storm can be.
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
Certainly.
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
All good
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Images are good, though the caption for the second is a bit vague. What is a TRMM, and what does the image represent?
I believe the image is self-explanatory. "Tropical Rainfall Measuring Mission" is some sort of mission, and the caption indicates the image is showing the amount of rainfall. ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:39, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

I believe I addressed everything but the TRMM bit. Thanks for the review! ♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 01:39, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]

Not optimal MoS compliance, but this article certainly meets the GA requirements now. Good work and congrats! Auree ★ 02:14, 16 January 2012 (UTC)[reply]