Talk:Tropical Storm Cindy (1963)/GA2

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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk · contribs) 18:36, 9 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Hello User:Cloudchased! I am going to be reviewing this article this afternoon. Hopefully it will eventually becoming a Good Article. The issues I have with passing the article are list below.--12george1 (talk) 18:36, 9 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"The third named storm of the 1963 Atlantic hurricane season" - Wikilink "named storm" to Tropical cyclone naming
"Despite favorable conditions, with high sea surface temperatures, the storm only intensified into a Category 1 hurricane; after peaking with 1-minute maximum sustained winds of 80 mph (130 km/h), it made landfall at High Island on the morning of 17 September as a slightly weaker system with an atmospheric pressure of 996 mbar (hPa; 29.41 inHg)." - I think you should just split this into two sentences at that semicolon.
"Cindy remained nearly stationary for nearly a day," ---> "Cindy remained nearly stationary for almost a day,"
"As Cindy made its gradual approach towards Galveston that evening, only slightly heightened wind speeds were observed, peaking at 80 mph (130 km/h).[1]" - According to the {{Atlantic hurricane best track}}, Cindy reached sustained winds of 80 mph at 0000 UTC on September 17, not the evening of September 16.

00z is very much within the realm of "that evening" for real-world purposes imo. – Juliancolton | ^Talk 18:46, 9 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

"Soon after moving ashore, Cindy became nearly stationary for 18 hours,[1] maintaining Category 1 intensity before weakening to a tropical depression;[3] the remnants of Cindy gradually turned westward-to-southwestward and decreased in strength during 18 and 19 September" - So you just skip from Category 1 to tropical depression status (you forgot to mention tropical storm status) and don't mention a date for any of those events?
"the remnants of Cindy gradually turned westward-to-southwestward and decreased in strength during 18 and 19 September." - This should probably just be another sentence.
"Cindy finally dissipated on 20 September while situated west of Corpus Christi,[3] the first hurricane to form in the Gulf of Mexico since 1960.[1]" - I know this would make two short sentences, but I suggest splitting it because neither part of this sentence has anything to do with each other, except for the fact that you are talking about Cindy. My suggestion: "Cindy finally dissipated on 20 September while situated west of Corpus Christi.[3] This was the first hurricane to form in the Gulf of Mexico since 1960.[1]"
"Despite a brief power outage at Lamarque, power was quickly restored after the storm." - Try to avoid using "power" twice in the same sentence. Here's what I would suggest: "Despite a brief power outage at Lamarque, electricity was quickly restored after the storm."
Why does only reference #3 have an accessdate?
Reference #1 needs a date (March 1964).

Think I covered all of them except for the issue to which jc replied; take a look? Cloudchased (talk) 19:54, 12 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Oops, I didn't notice you posted this at the bottom. Anyway, I am going to pass this article and list it as a Good Article. Congratulations,--12george1 (talk) 22:21, 12 July 2014 (UTC)[reply]