Talk:Tropical Storm Bolaven (2018)/GA1

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Reviewer: Usernameunique (talk · contribs) 21:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

in as many weeks — Is this anywhere in the body of the article?
- Removed since sources don't give a specific time frame. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
areas that had already suffered severe effects — Ditto.
- Changed wording. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
at least 11,000 people were evacuated from their homes — Can you really say "were evacuated"? That sounds like an official declaration that they had to leave.
- Rewrote this. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Meteorological history

was named Bolaven by the JMA — If the JMA is the Japan Meteorological Agency, this should be clarified.
- I forgot to abbreviate this... ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Bolaven's time as a tropical storm was short — Sounds a bit flowery/editorial.
- Removed it. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Effects

Bolaven, known in the Philippines as Tropical Depression Agaton — That the JMA named the storm Bolaven is discussed in the above section. Why is its second name, Agaton, in this section instead?
- Added naming by PAGASA to MH. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
was the third of three consecutive systems that impacted the Visayas and Mindanao, after tropical storms Kai-tak (Urduja) and Tembin (Vinta). — Meaning there were no other tropical storms in the world between any of those three?
- There were, just not in the Western Pacific. Meant that it was the third system to hit Visayas and Mindanao since Dec 2017, and reworded accordingly. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
was hoisted — Meaning a physical flag or something similar?
- Reworded. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Port closures across the Philippines affected over 3,600 passengers — Does that include the aforementioned 1,200?
- Yes, reworded to link the two sentences more closely. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
Bolaven affected a total of 236,449 families — What does "affected" mean? Their houses were torn down? Their evening TV program was replaced with an urgent storm-advisory program?
- Presumably people who were hit by rain and wind from the cyclone. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
two fishermen hailing from Iloilo — Why not just "two fishermen from Iloilo"?
- No idea why I wrote that, honestly. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

See also

You mention how two other storms spanned two seasons, but you don't explicitly state in the article that Bolaven did so itself.
- Whoops, I completely forgot to look over this section. Since the season runs year-round in the Western Pacific, spanning two seasons or calendar years (same thing) isn't rare and not particularly worth mentioning. Replaced with storms that had more similar tracks/impacts, and added the relevant set index articles. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Overall

KN2731, comments above. --Usernameunique (talk) 21:15, 20 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done, Usernameunique. Thanks for the review. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 07:48, 21 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]
  - Looks good, KN2731. Passing now. --Usernameunique (talk) 01:01, 24 May 2020 (UTC)[reply]