Talk:Training Season/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: MaranoFan (talk · contribs) 18:06, 22 July 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Medxvo (talk · contribs) 21:25, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

For the date the song was written, I think this source can be used instead of the YouTube source and the note!

Thank you so much for finding this! I actually did not like using the YouTube source.--N Ø 18:32, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Glad to help :) I was also happy when I found the source! Medxvo (talk) 21:34, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"On 24 January 2024, Lipa posted a TikTok video" → the source says 25 January
"She premiered it at the 66th Annual Grammy Awards on 4 February 2024" → can we add another source that confirms the date of the ceremony? Ref 117 (Uproxx) is a good option
"Lisa Wright of DIY believed they constituted ..." → "Lisa Wright of DIY believed the singles constituted ..."
"Aimee Phillips of Clash thought "the beats [were] darker, more textured and sexier, [and] the lyrics have more purpose, bringing us back to the strong and confident pop star image Dua Lipa has long portrayed" → is there a way to paraphrase this?
"It entered the US Billboard Hot 100 .... "Training Season" debuted at number 11 on the Canadian Hot 100 .... In Australia, the song entered at number 12 ..." → "Training Season" entered the US Billboard Hot 100 .... It debuted at number 11 on the Canadian Hot 100 .... In Australia, "Training Season" entered at number 12 ..."; since the Canadian chart sentence follows the US chart sentence, I thought mentioning the song's name at the first incidence is a better option
"a platinum certification in Poland" → "and a platinum certification in Poland"
"In it, ..." → "In the video, ..."
Pyrotechnics can be linked
"One line from "Dance the Night" was included, before she transitioned into singing "Houdini" in the middle of the stage and performed the dance sequence from its music video" → is there a reason that this information should be mentioned here in this article?

The performance has been covered as a mashup by sources so the role of the other two songs would probably be a natural curiosity in readers' minds.--N Ø 18:32, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

"It was well received by the audience" → "The performance was well received by the audience"
"among the twelve performances" → "among the ceremony's twelve performances"
Ref 7; Rolling Stone India → Rolling Stone India
Ref 15; Billboard Philippines → Billboard Philippines
Ref 24; can we use an Apple Music source instead of Spotify? just a suggestion

Seems like whoever added Spotify did so because Apple Music gives an incorrect date. Sometimes all/most versions of a song get incorrectly published with the original's date on iTunes/Apple.--N Ø 18:32, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Ref 100; linking the publication
Ref 125; is there any other reliable source? I found this source and this source, but they don't clearly indicate that it is a live version, though. I suggest adding one of these sources along with the apple music source of the version (ref 25)
Ref 136; Rolling Stone UK → Rolling Stone UK
The access of the Roling Stone references (53, 105, and 122) should be limited not subscription
Ref 9 and 124; not archived

That's all! @MaranoFan: This is another well-made article, just a few concerns that needs to be addressed/discussed :) On hold for now. Medxvo (talk) 21:25, 23 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the review, Medxvo! I am impressed that you did your own research and provided reference suggestions where additional ones were required! I had the TS Productions article on my to-do list but I am glad to see that is already getting reviewed.--N Ø 18:32, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]

@MaranoFan: Thank you! I am always glad to help make the articles that I'm interested in look as good as possible. Everything looks amazing to me now and I'm fine with the two justifications above. I will ✓ Pass the article now, congratulations! I also really appreciate that you considered reviewing TS Productions, it is actually my first GA nomination. I hope I can get the article to GA status soon; I've been working on it for a while :) Have a good day/night! Medxvo (talk) 21:34, 24 October 2024 (UTC)[reply]