Talk:Toyohara Kunichika/GA1

GA Review

Hello. I will be doing the Good Article review for this article. I've only briefly glanced through it, but here are some things that really stuck out to me:

The lead needs to be two full paragraphs summarizing all the main points of the article, including both his life and career. See WP:LEAD.
All the pictures are scrunched up in the middle. Can any of them be placed elsewhere in the article?
Please combine like citations in the notes section. To do this: in the first mention of a cite, write it like <ref name=example>Newland p 11</ref>, and on the second mention of the same source, write it like <ref name=example/>. Obviously, exchange the word example for a more suitable name. A few citations that can be combined include 3 and 6; 9, 12, and 14; 10, 13, and 16; 42 and 44; plus some others.
When websites are used, please format them in the notes according to Template:cite web.
Citations should go behind punctuation, without a space between the period and the number.
The examples of signatures seems out of place. Why include it? Is he known for his multiple signatures? Has someone commented on his signatures? If text isn't included, it doesn't make much sense to include the image.
Please wikilink full dates. June 5, 1835 --> June 5 1835.

I'll read through the article in depth later, so I can make more specific suggestions. Nikki311 19:14, 6 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Here are some more specific suggestions:

In Artist on the cusp of a new era, make sure all the quotes have quotations around them.
He is known to have done some shunga (erotic art) , but attribution can be difficult as he did not always sign them. - source?
When a ref is at the end of a paragraph, is it referencing all the information before it?

The article needs some pretty heavy copyediting for punctuation, grammar, and Manual of Style problems. If everything else gets taken care of, I don't mind doing that myself. The article will be placed on hold for seven days to allow for improvements. Nikki311 03:06, 7 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]

The seven days are up, so I'm failing the article as none of my suggestions were addressed. Feel free to use these suggestions in the future and renominate the article. Good luck! Nikki311 01:47, 14 June 2008 (UTC)[reply]