Talk:Towel Power/GA1

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Reviewer: Zanimum (talk · contribs) 20:21, 30 December 2012 (UTC) I'll take a read through this. -- Zanimum (talk) 20:21, 30 December 2012 (UTC)[reply]

You short form one of the references as "Raible 2010", but he's the third credited for the full citation, so it's a confusing at first glance. Did he specifically author that chapter of the publication? -- Zanimum (talk) 21:57, 13 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Yes he did. The book is listed as the first two (Douglas & Kerr) as authors on the cover and publishing credits, but on the first page chapter about Towel Power it states "by Garry Raible". To be honest I was unsure how to do it so I listed the individuals from the publishing credits first since I figured they are considered the authors of the book and Raible third since he was credited in the book as writing this section. On the individual referencing I used Raible since he wrote the section I am referencing. If you think I should change it I could do that. Thanks --Mo Rock...Monstrous (leech44) 00:23, 14 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I was tempted to suggest changing it to have Raible first of the three, but I think leaving it as is is okay. -- Zanimum (talk) 17:15, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Kudos, overall. On a personal level, it's nice to tie a variety of things I remember hearing about (Neale in the stands, the origin of the white towels) together into one story. I love that there's an image of the towels prepared for the fans, before people entered.

Was there no RS indication of which three players were ejected with Neilsen? Or was this a conscious decision to omit their names?

none of the sources I have really say who was thrown out. I thought that there was a typo in one of the sources because it mentions three players by name, but then says two were thrown out. The book says something Neilsen was "escorted" off the ice by three players which I though was referring to the players ejected, but after a re-read I don't think that they were ejected but making sure the coach got off the ice and didn't do anything else rash. I change the wording to two in order to reflect this error. Long way to get there, but no the RS do not state exactly who was ejected.

You might consider breaking the first paragraph of Aftermath into two, end with "extreme way for him to react", and start anew with the fan response. That said, I appreciate meaty paragraphs.

I went ahead and split them up.

Any indication of when the Canucks organization itself started providing towels, as opposed to vendors and fans supplying their own? Was it in the 1980s, 90s, 00s?

None of the RS I have state when they began doing it as a franchise. I did some Google searches, but have been unable to find anything that says when they began doing it.

You might consider listing what year the 20,500 stat is from, in the prose itself, unless they've produced exactly that amount every season since 1982.

The wording makes it sound that that is the number produced for every game, "they have been producing 20,500 of the towels for every game."

Otherwise, prose, pics, proper references, it's ready for GA. Most of the above are just "I'm curious", as opposed to necessities. -- Zanimum (talk) 17:14, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I have made some changes and replied to everything above. I'll try to see if I can find a time when the franchise began producing towels, but at this point I don't think any thing reliable will turn up. Thank you for the review. Cheers --Mo Rock...Monstrous (leech44) 18:12, 19 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Apologies for the second delay, yes, this is now a GA. -- Zanimum (talk) 14:02, 28 January 2013 (UTC)[reply]