Talk:Touch of My Hand/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:27, 21 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

Balewa Muhammad, and Sheppard Solomon → comma is superfluous here
and produced by Harry and Solomon → while production was handled by Harry and Solomon (word rep.)
contemporary critics → link to Music journalism

Infobox

November 12, 2003 (album) → November 12, 2003 (via album)
As a writer, please only state "Spears" and not her full name
"Trip hop" is not sourced in the article, so remove it

Background

Spears previewed the song to Quddus Philippe → state "The singer" here for alternation
I really love the vibe of "Touch of My Hand." → I really love the vibe of 'Touch of My Hand'.

Composition

Unlink Britney Spears here and only state her last name
link the two genres
"out of control." → " before full stop
The lyrics of the song are about the act of masturbation: → As aforementioned, the lyrics are about the act of masturbation (unlink):
The song received many comparisons to the work of Madonna. → Shouldn't you merge this into "Reception"?
"nearly eight-minute trance remix," → " before comma

Reception

contemporary music critics → link to Music journalism
Ruth Mitchell of BBC Music called the song → Use "track" here for alternation
club sound of "Vogue"-era → club sound of 'Vogue'-era

Live performances

from the "Toxic" → from her "Toxic" (2003)
You don't need three paragraphs here; you can combine all of them if you want to
You can add an image here from one of her controversial performances

Credits and personnel

Unlink the album

Other stuff

Copy-violation

62.5% is too much! Please look at the first source and try to reword it.

Sample

Sample seems stable.

Links

No problems here!

References

As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article
2 dead links! Please fix!

Outcome

On hold for 7 days! Good luck with editing, Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:23, 22 February 2017 (UTC)[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: Could you allow me additional time for work on this article. There is currently an ongoing discussion regarding whether or not this article is notable. I would like to gain a clear consensus of this article's future before making these changes to it. Regards, Carbrera (talk) 01:25, 3 March 2017 (UTC).[reply]

@Cartoon network freak: I apologize for interrupting this review, but I would suggest failing this until the notability of the article is established. If the article is established as notable, then it can be revised and nominated again for GAN. How does that sound @Carbrera:? It seems that it will take more time a clear consensus to be reached about this article's future. Aoba47 (talk) 17:21, 6 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Failing this per suggestion. As aforementioned, if the article is going to be kept, you can renominate. Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 21:21, 6 March 2017 (UTC)[reply]

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.