Talk:Tom Hiddleston/GA1

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Reviewer: XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 14:13, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Prose

Lead "The Dragon School" would be better as simply "Dragon School" in infobox.

Early life and education The first sentence is rather lengthy. Try breaking it into two sentences like "Hiddleston was born in Westminster, London. He is the son of chemist James Norman Hiddleston and arts administrator/former stage manager Diana Patricia Servaes The sentence on his sisters is also a bit lengthy, and "actor" should be "actress" for his sister Emma. No problem with including birth years, though it would read better as something like "His younger sister Emma is also actress while his elder sister Sarah is a journalist in India."

Career

Film and television "British" is an ambiguous term. Please specify whether "he began doing British television" is referring to English, Scottish, or Welsh. In the third paragraph, add something like "Hiddleston later said" or "Hiddleston said of Branagh" right before the quote on Kenneth Branagh. In the seventh paragraph, change the link from "Black Wings Has My Angel (film)" to simply "Black Wings Has My Angel". A redirect isn't very useful here. In the eighth paragraph, change the tense from "will play" to "played" as this film has been released. Also in the eighth paragraph, is it known when "Close Enough" is scheduled to be released or at least begin production? If no specifications on datescan be found, this should be removed. In the ninth paragraph, be more specific on "in the summer", i.e. "in summer 2014", or even a month if known.

Sourcing

Early life and education Daily Mail (ref#7) is not a reliable source. Find something that isn't a tabloid or remove altogether. ref#8 doesn't contain RADA detail

Career

Film and television Again, don't use tabloids (ref#9). Either replace or remove.

Theatre ref#8 doesn't contain detail on this either Remove Daily Mail (ref#28)

Filmography

Film ref#41 should read Entertainment Weekly rather than "e.w.com"

Coverage

No problems here

Neutrality

No problems here

Stability

No problems here

GA on hold

Fix these up within the next seven days and I will pass the GAN. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 17:11, 11 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

Made suggested edits

"The Dragon School" would be better as simply "Dragon School" in infobox. Done
The first sentence is rather lengthy. Try breaking it into two sentences like "Hiddleston was born in Westminster, London. He is the son of chemist James Norman Hiddleston and arts administrator/former stage manager Diana Patricia Servaes Done
The sentence on his sisters is also a bit lengthy, and "actor" should be "actress" for his sister Emma. No problem with including birth years, though it would read better as something like "His younger sister Emma is also actress while his elder sister Sarah is a journalist in India." Done
"British" is an ambiguous term. Please specify whether "he began doing British television" is referring to English, Scottish, or Welsh.
- Removing that bit entirely is also fine, so Done
In the third paragraph, add something like "Hiddleston later said" or "Hiddleston said of Branagh" right before the quote on Kenneth Branagh. Done
In the seventh paragraph, change the link from "Black Wings Has My Angel (film)" to simply "Black Wings Has My Angel". A redirect isn't very useful here. Done
In the eighth paragraph, change the tense from "will play" to "played" as this film has been released. Done
Also in the eighth paragraph, is it known when "Close Enough" is scheduled to be released or at least begin production? If no specifications on datescan be found, this should be removed. Done
In the ninth paragraph, be more specific on "in the summer", i.e. "in summer 2014", or even a month if known. Done
Daily Mail (ref#7) is not a reliable source. Find something that isn't a tabloid or remove altogether. Done
ref#8 doesn't contain RADA detail Done
Again, don't use tabloids (ref#9). Either replace or remove. (which tabloid?)
- Daily Record Done
ref#8 doesn't contain detail on this either (again, which one?)
- Yahoo Biography Done
Remove Daily Mail (ref#28) Done
ref#41 should read Entertainment Weekly rather than "e.w.com" Done

LADY LOTUS • TALK 12:18, 12 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]

GA Pass

Nice work! I'm passing for GA. XXSNUGGUMSXX (talk) 14:01, 12 March 2014 (UTC)[reply]