Talk:Tobacco smoke enema/GA1

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Reviewer: Sasata (talk) 19:29, 17 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Hi PoD, I've signed up for this review, and will have comments up in a day or two. Sasata (talk) 19:29, 17 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Very interesting and humorous (excuse the pun) article. I have a few minor comments, and think the refs could be a bit fuller, but otherwise it looks very good. Sasata (talk) 02:34, 18 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

perhaps some (approximate) dates could be added for Nicot's and Monardes tobacco uses to help set the background, and align the reader for the "contemporary medical science" statement which follows.
- The source doesn't give a date. I could investigate further but I'm not sure its that important, this section is a brief introduction to help the reader understand why some thought that tobacco could be medicinally valuable.

I would argue that the average reader (or at least me) would be interested to know the century when some thought this could be useful treatment. Sasata (talk) 16:30, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Tobacco is capitalized in one isolated instance, not sure if it's intentional
- A typo, fixed
panacea currently links to the article on the Greek goddess, in an easter egg sort of way
- Fixed
"Tobacco was also used to fumigate buildings, to discourage disease." needs fixing
- Fixed
date for Thomas Syndeham's early example?
- Added
link to bleeding (bloodletting?)
- Linked
"pouring hot cordial down her throat" link cordial? (I do not know what this is, suspect it's something Brits drink?)
- Linked
"On the advice of a passing sailor, the woman's husband inserted the stem of the sailor's pipe into her rectum, covered the bowl with a piece of perforated paper, and "blew hard"." lol
link Thames
- Linked
Source Anon1 should have volume #
- Done
Anon3 should have journal title, volume, number (click "show full citation" at the Jstor page); isn't the author Frederick Walter Lowndes?
- It has all that, barring the author who I've now added.
Curry 1805 needs location, and volume #
- Done
Dick 1847 needs volume # (and issue# if they use it)
- I can't supply that right now, I'll investigate further to see where I found it.
location for Hurt et al., 1996
- I am uncertain which edition Google Books have used, so will not enter this right now.
Hughes 1982 = vol. 285; Kell 1965 = vol. 78; Long 1847=vol 11; Japiot 1844 = vol 7
- Sorry I'm not sure what you're trying to say here. Volume numbers are already included.
  - My apologies, I see it there too now, don't know why I missed it the first time. Sasata (talk) 16:30, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]
location for Sydenham 1809
- Done Parrot of Doom 14:48, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry, I forgot all about this. Will address tomorrow! Parrot of Doom 22:56, 21 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Ok, everything looks to be in order and I'll promote the article now. Thanks for the entertaining read! Sasata (talk) 16:30, 23 July 2010 (UTC)[reply]