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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:53, 21 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]


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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()
3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

I will crack on with this now! --K. Peake 08:53, 21 November 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

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  • Change Columbia Recording Studios to Columbia Recording under the studios parameter in the infobox
  • Pipe Tom Wilson to Tom Wilson (record producer)
  • "which was released on his fourth studio album" → "first released on his fourth studio album,"
  • Add a sentence with notable info about writing from the first section
  • Move the recording sentence to being the one before lyrical content
  • Mention next to the critics suggested part that the narrator advises Ramona not to follow others' advice
  • Pipe Sara Lownds to Sara Dylan
  • "for Another Side of Bob Dylan," → "for the album,"
  • Remove the album release in August since that is not notable
  • "have ranked the song as" → "have ranked it as"
  • Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
  • "Belgium and Luxembourg in 1967, and has been" → "Belgium, and Luxembourg in 1967, and has since been"
  • Mention what the several live versions include

Background and recording

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  • "The "To Ramona" lyrics were" → "The lyrics of "To Ramona" were"
  • Wikilink as the May Fair Hotel instead
  • Add a comma after "All I Really Want to Do"
  • "On June 9 at" → "On June 9, 1964, at" per this being a new para
  • Remove the comma before Another Side of Bob Dylan
  • Pipe Tom Wilson to Tom Wilson (record producer), while mentioning that he was the producer of all the tracks
  • "as the sixth track, the last" → "as the sixth track and the last"
  • Remove the release year of "The Last Letter" from brackets when it is already mentioned in prose

Lyrical interpretation

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  • Maybe add relevant text to the img of Suze Rotolo?
  • "The song ends with" → "It ends with"
  • [8] should solely be invoked at the end of the sentence
  • "argue that the song may indeed refer to Baez," → "argue that Dylan may indeed refer to her,"
  • "Oliver Trager and" → "Oliver Trager, and"
  • Pipe Sara Lownds to Sara Dylan
  • "John Nogowski saw it" → "John Nogowski sees it"
  • "Jim Beviglia wrote that the track" → "Jim Beviglia writes that the track"
  • "as the narrator expresses" → "as they express"

Critical reception

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  • Retitle to Reception per the rankings
  • "Heylin described the track as" → "Heylin describes the track as"
  • "words or advice."" → "words or advice"." per MOS:QWQ
  • "Trager praised the" → "Trager praises the"
  • "but added that "Dylan fumbles" → "but added how "Dylan fumbles"
  • "and described it as" → "and describes it as"
  • "has ever written."" → "has ever written"."
  • Wikilink Rolling Stone
  • "remarked of "To Ramona" and" → "remarks of "To Ramona" and"
  • Cut down the amount of direct quoting for the above per WP:QUOTEFARM

Live performances and later releases

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  • Make the releases para the last of this section instead
  • Pipe B-side to A-side and B-side
  • "Belgium and Luxembourg" → "Belgium, and Luxembourg"
  • Wikilink compilation album
  • "Dylan's older songs "re-envisioned almost to the point of non-recognition."" → "his older songs "re-envisioned almost to the point of non-recognition"." per MOS:QWQ

Credits and personnel

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Notes

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  • The ref is not needed for this note when it is invoked at the end of the actual sentence

References

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  • Maybe cite ref 13 solely in place of refs 11 and 17?
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  • Good

Final comments and verdict

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