Talk:Tiny the Terrible/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Lee Vilenski (talk · contribs) 06:01, 21 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

Hello, I am planning on reviewing this article for GA Status, over the next couple of days. Thank you for nominating the article for GA status. I hope I will learn some new information, and that my feedback is helpful.

If nominators or editors could refrain from updating the particular section that I am updating until it is complete, I would appreciate it to remove a edit conflict. Please address concerns in the section that has been completed above (If I've raised concerns up to references, feel free to comment on things like the lede.)

I generally provide an overview of things I read through the article on a first glance. Then do a thorough sweep of the article after the feedback is addressed. After this, I will present the pass/failure. I may use strikethrough tags when concerns are met. Even if something is obvious why my concern is met, please leave a message as courtesy.

Best of luck! you can also use the {{done}} tag to state when something is addressed. Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Please let me know after the review is done, if you were happy with the review! Obviously this is regarding the article's quality, however, I want to be happy and civil to all, so let me know if I have done a good job, regardless of the article's outcome.

Immediate Failures

It is a long way from meeting any one of the six good article criteria -
It contains copyright infringements -
It has, or needs, cleanup banners that are unquestionably still valid. These include{{cleanup}}, {{POV}}, {{unreferenced}} or large numbers of {{citation needed}}, {{clarify}}, or similar tags. (See also {{QF-tags}}). -
It is not stable due to edit warring on the page. -

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Prose

Lede

~~Lede seems a bit short, is there nothing else notable about the subject? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:00, 25 October 2020 (UTC)~~[reply]
- I expanded a bit, I'm not sure what else to put in there.
~~American wrestler, dwarf, actor and politician. - is this really the correct wording. Is his profession a dwarf? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:00, 25 October 2020 (UTC)~~[reply]
~~American professional wrestler...., and link here instead of later Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:00, 25 October 2020 (UTC)~~[reply]
~~No info on his actual wrestling career? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:00, 25 October 2020 (UTC)~~[reply]

General

His father was a Vietnam War veteran of normal height, though he says his mother was shorter than he is - than who is? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Is this better?
Throughout the 1990s, Tunstall was arrested several times on misdemeanor charges that ranged from assaulting a police office to driving without a license. He was sentenced to six months’ probation in 1996 for resisting arrest and disorderly conduct charges. A 1999 charge of simple assault was ultimately dismissed.[3] - this has some WP:BLP issues. We should cite this a bit better. "Simple Assault", is this the name of a crime? I didn't think we actually mentioned crimes that are thrown out per WP:CRIME. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed the paragraph, which I hope you don't mind. It mostly talks about arrests, not convictions, and although he did get probation at some point, I'm not sure if it's especially relevant. This also helps with the chronology issues that we'll address more later.
Tunstall began a career in professional wrestling in the 1990s.[3] - is this really personal life? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- I found it hard not to include his profession since we're talking about work history and finances in that paragraph.
In 2006, he said he had been receiving Social Security Disability Insurance since 1995 - what's the disability? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- I wish I could find more about this, because it is relevant, but the source just mentions he's diabled and that he is able to collect benefits for it.
He is an African-American - is this relevant? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- He's apparently the first African-American to seek the office, which was a milestone. I moved the paragraph to political life which may make more sense and help with chronology.
He supported George W. Bush because he "liked the way he carried himself". - also this. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Removed this.
Tunstall describes his time in wrestling, where he's better known under the monikers "Tiny the Terrible" and "Little Dougie Tunstall", as "more or less like therapy" - what does this mean? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Lol, I don't know. He said it though. I removed it because it's confusing. Also rephrased and removed "Little Dougie Tunstall", which he's less known by and derivative of his real name.
Tiny the Terrible isn't used in the prose until it is say about where he worked. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Is this better?
In February 2000, he boasted that he could be a star in a major promotion if given the chance, stating: "If Vince McMahon gave me an opportunity to go in front of an audience, I guarantee I'd have a nation screaming my name."[6] Tunstall subsequently made two appearances on WWF/E Raw. On the March 13, 2000 episode of Raw, he appeared as one half of "The Twin Towers", a dwarf duo that Stephanie McMahon joked would face The Rock at WrestleMania 2000.[9][10] He wrestled his only WWE match on the July 25, 2005 episode of Raw under the ring name Cloacas, where he teamed with Viscera to take on Antonio of The Heart Throbs and Pocket Rocket in a winning effort. - this whole bit needs rewording. Why did WWE hire him? Why does it matter what he said (considering he didn't make an impact).
- I removed the "boast"ful quote, hopefully that improves the paragraph. Obviously we don't know why WWE brought him in and his interview with the paper probably had nothing to do with it. I think he credits New Jack with getting him on WWE TV, but that's pretty dubious and doesn't belong here either.
WWF/E Raw - did he appear on Raw when it was part of WWF and WWE? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- I made a note about the WWF/E name change.
Should just link as WWE Raw Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
His notoriety in wrestling led to three appearances on The Jerry Springer Show. - doing what? Isn't this more personal life than wrestling career? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- He was a guest, I moved this to personal life.
In 2020, Tunstall was part of a Dark Side of the Ring episode involving New Jack, in which he recounted the Mass Transit incident.[7] - you mention this earlier, maybe clump this all together. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Moved right after mentioning Mass Transit.
Link pawtucket. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Done.
"ghetto-style politics" such as door-to-door campaigning - is this ghetto style? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- Not typically, but it's a quote of his nonetheless.
His platform included opposing same-sex marriage, encouraging NASA to build a base in Pawtucket and giving stipends to those who took in homeless people. - is "platform" a political word? Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- It's now linked at its first mention.

The article in general needs to be rearranged, as it is all over the place. Either chronological, or by topic. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 17:14, 25 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]
- I think I addressed everything but I suspect you'll have a few followups. Thanks for taking his on, it's been awhile since we got to work together!LM2000 (talk) 05:29, 27 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

Review meta comments

I'll begin the review as soon as I can! If you fancy returning the favour, I have a list of nominations for review at WP:GAN and WP:FAC, respectively. I'd be very grateful if you were to complete one of these if you get time. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)}

Looks fine to me. Needs a bit of cleanup, but nothing to stop being a GA. Good work. Best Wishes, Lee Vilenski ^{(talk • contribs)} 21:00, 29 October 2020 (UTC)[reply]