Talk:Tina McKenzie/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:31, 2 July 2013 (UTC)

Comments

• I think you could expand the lead to cover how she became a Paralympian.
  • Expanded introduction. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• " As of 2012," it's mid-2013 now, do we have an update?
  • No. News is infrequent now that she's retired. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• If you link Albury, why not St Peters, New South Wales?
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• Suggest linking paraplegia.
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "Gliders" is mentioned in the infobox but nowhere else.
  • Changed to infobox to her clubs. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• " a result of a fall" presumably "as... " but a fall from what? More detail would be good here.
  • Added some details. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• There must be a link for a "guard"?
  • More or less. Added. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "In 2011/2012," nah, they gave her a grant at a specific point in time, but perhaps "For the 2011–12 season..."?
  • It would be the financial year, being a government grant. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "MacQuarie University" no need for capital Q.
  • Corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "Chancellors Award" apostrophe somewhere I expect?
  • Addded. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "She is a.." for new sections reintroduce Mckenzie.
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• Is it Mckenzie or McKenzie?
  • Aaaaargggh. It's McKenzie. Had the pages moved. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "three game test series" -> "three-game Test series"?
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• "62-37 " en-dash per WP:DASH.
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• What's "10:47 minutes"? Do you mean 10 minutes, 47 seconds?
  • Yes. Changed to that. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• Standardise the accessdate format for refs.
  • Done. Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
• Ref titles need en-dashes rather than hyphens (per WP:DASH).
  • What are ref titles? Hawkeye7 (talk) 22:35, 2 July 2013 (UTC)
    • When you cite a source, you usually use a "title" field, or in simple terms, the headline of the webpage you're using. These should use en-dashes, not hyphens. If it's too problematic, leave me a note and I'll show you what I mean. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:45, 3 July 2013 (UTC)
      • Done, but that's a really, really bad rule. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:11, 3 July 2013 (UTC)
        • Why? The Rambling Man (talk) 21:53, 3 July 2013 (UTC)

The Rambling Man (talk) 17:44, 2 July 2013 (UTC)

• • • • • • When the links decay the first thing I do is run a search on the title. Most of the time, the page has merely moved. Otherwise I have to fish it out of an archive. When we alter the titles, we reduce the chance of being able to find it again. Hawkeye7 (talk) 00:22, 4 July 2013 (UTC)
            • Most search engines totally ignore punctuation, so there'd be no difference in results between looking for an en-dash or a hyphen. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:39, 4 July 2013 (UTC)

On-hold "good article" nomination

This article failed good article nomination. This is how the article, as of July 2, 2013, compares against the six good article criteria:

1. Well written?: Comments above.

2. Factually accurate?: No issues.

3. Broad in coverage?: Yes, seems okay, although worried about the fact she has a club called "Gliders" in her infobox but no mention of it at all in the article.

4. Neutral point of view?: No worries.

5. Article stability?: Yes.

6. Images?: No problems here.

Let me know when you're through these issues. Thank you for your work so far. The Rambling Man (talk) 17:44, 2 July 2013 (UTC)

• All points addressed. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:11, 3 July 2013 (UTC)