Talk:Time Has Come Today (Grey's Anatomy)/GA1
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Reviewer: M.Mario (talk · contribs) 16:27, 5 July 2012 (UTC)
Disambigs, Refs & External
Please fix the disambigs.
- Working Could you name the disambiguation links? Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 10:44, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
- Done - Ive done it for you. — M.Mario (T/C) 10:53, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
IMDB is an unreliable source, and should be deleted unless I will have to fail the article. Make sure you replace with another reference.Please link Works and Publishers on all refsReference 10- References should not be in capital letters.There are no external links? Such as the Greys Anatomy template, this needs fixing!
Infobox
Again, the music needs to be in the article.Link characters of Olivia Harper, etc.
Lead
storylines is one word - fix throughout article.Missing a ) after Ellen Pompeo.Take California out of brakets, just put Los Angeles, California."Loretta Devine (Adele Webber) reprised her role as a guest star, in addition to Chris O'Donnell (Finn Dandridge), Kate Burton (Dr. Ellis Grey) and Sarah Utterback (Olivia Harper)" -> In the first paragraph and most episodes it goes character then actor in brackets, however you swap them round. Put; the characters of Adele Webber (Loretta Devine)...."The title of the episode refers to the song, "Time Has Come Today", by the soul music band, The Chambers Brothers" -> Source?"Running for 45 minutes and 38 seconds" -> Not needed in Lead.
Plot
"requesting a choice between his career as a surgeon and his marriage to her" -> giving him a choice between his career or his marriage."Dr. Preston Burke (Isaiah Washington) faces the aftermath of the shooting" -> Dr. Preston Burke (Isaiah Washington) faces the aftermath of being shot, past tense.- "An infant with a severe heart condition is admitted in neonatology, and is revealed to have been abandoned in a schoolyard by his biological mother, whose identity lies between four pre-adolescents" -> Boy's name and actor. Maybe explain "four pre-adolescents".
- Not done The boy was admitted in neonatology, therefore, he was a newborn. He was not credited, as many baby actors on television. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 10:10, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
Link quaritine to appropriate article.Link "plague"."and ultimately dies in Dr. Miranda Bailey (Chandra Wilson)'s guilt" -> and ultimately dies in Dr. Miranda Bailey (Chandra Wilson)'s care"to the guilt over the death of both Toussant and Duquette." -> to the guilt over the death of both Toussant and Duquette, whom she also operated on.
Production
Image: Put full name and Link. Also, put (pictured).Link "second season"."which is the headquarters building for the media company Fisher Communications and Fisher's ABC affiliated Komo radio and television stations for Seattle" -> Needs to be cut down, "media company" is not needed. Also, you need to mention that the series is set in Seatle.- Im not sure whether the location information is neccesary to the artice, more to the main Grey's Anatomy article.
- Not done I think it is helpful information to the reader, in order to contrast the fictional setting and the filming setting.
Change "taped" to "filmed".Unlink second mention of second season."Because Denny died, and Burke got shot and Meredith lost her panties.", stated Rhimes" -> Removed .- Put surname of actors in brackets.
- Not sure who you are referring to.
"the prominence Grey's underwear has in the first episode of the season" - the prominence which Grey's underwear has in the first episode of the season...
Reception
Reception: Nielsen -> Nielsen ratings"Meredith Grey, whose story line received negative critiques" -> Meredith not needed.- Remember to put actor names in brackets.
- Not sure (again) who you are referring to.
For the crosses, what I mean is: Izzie (Heigl), Meredith (Pompeo), like that. Good work! — M.Mario (T/C) 10:26, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
- But am I not supposed do to that only twice for each character? Once in the lead and once in the article. Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 10:44, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
- Well as a reader, by the time I had got to Reception, I had forgot who played who, however, it is not neccesary, nor part of the criteria. Once you have finished the points you still say you are fixing, then I will pass. — M.Mario (T/C) 10:50, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
- Done All issues have been addressed. Thank you so much for your thorough review! Jonathan Harold Koszeghi (talk) 11:16, 8 July 2012 (UTC)
- Well as a reader, by the time I had got to Reception, I had forgot who played who, however, it is not neccesary, nor part of the criteria. Once you have finished the points you still say you are fixing, then I will pass. — M.Mario (T/C) 10:50, 8 July 2012 (UTC)