Talk:Tilocálar/GA1

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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 22:12, 6 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

"Tilocálar - the string Tilo is of Atacameno language origin -[2] is" better with commas than hyphens (which should be en-dashes).
Replaced it with a footnote. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"at about 3,167 metres (10,390 ft) elevation." at an elevation of approximately ...
"of four[3] or two small" odd ref placement, and this curious sentence needs a footnote.
Footnoted this. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"the larger of the two" or four presumably??
Cut the number, as it is the largest irrespective of the number of volcanoes. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"one 4.3 kilometres (2.7 mi) " adj=on in the convert template here.
"three separate units' what do you mean by units here?
Linked. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Are the dome and crater counting as two of the (maybe) four volcanoes here?
By one version of events, yes. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"diameter of 400 by 300 metres" diameter is linear, not area.
Replaced with a hyphen. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"between 50–80 metres" no need for between.
"geographical depression" what's one of those, a valley?
Probably, the sources don't spell it out. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"compressional tectonic forces" any link?
"magmatism" link.
"Argentina an" comma after Arg.
"emission of ignimbrites and" overlinked.
"Lava flows have..." this is probably the most incomprehensible single sentence I have ever read. I know this only GAN but some of this jargon needs footnote explanation.
I see, but objectively I don't think that one can describe chemical compositions of rocks without resorting to a lot of jargon. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
Ok, well to enable our readers to get a handle on this, add some footnotes as we do at FAC for these terms. It's not intelligible to most of us, like 99% of us, right now. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 17:40, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
@The Rambling Man:Footnoted some terms, but we don't actually footnote all such terms - Coropuna and other geology FACses do not footnote chemical terms. Concepts like "phenocryst", yes, which I have now done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:57, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]
"differentiation processes" what are they?
"the monogenetic volcanoes.[28]" overlinked.
" argon-argon dating" should be en-dash, not hyphen betwixt the argons.
"of 730000±500000 and 460000±50000 years" comma separators for 1000s
of 3-4. en-dash.
"margin of the Salar de Atacama,[35]" overlinked.
Ref 2, SHOUTING.
Ref 22 needs en-dash in that latitude range.
Ref 29 en-dash.
Same for ref 35.
Ref 36 SHOUTING.
Non-English sources should be tagged with a language parameter.
"Pourrut, Pierre" date format needs to be made consistent.

That's all I have. The Rambling Man (Keep wearing the mask...) 15:14, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@The Rambling Man:Replied and processed. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk) 17:30, 7 September 2021 (UTC)[reply]