Talk:Tierney Dining Cars

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@NE Ent: thanks for checking this thing for UK-isms etc per my request elsewhere. I've got a few of minor queries regarding what you did, sorry.

"Reinvesting the profits by 1905": I think this needs a comma after profits - he was reinvesting from 1895-ish and by 1905 had 38 wagons.
Insalubrious is indeed a relatively uncommon word. However, the sources refer to much more than just an unhealthy environment - it was at least as much the type of customer they attracted, ie: the dirt poor/the down-and-outs, the alcoholics etc. Tierney's stuff, by comparison, was upmarket in design and clientele.
Also, that sentence now says "these were being sold off ..." and I unsure whether it is clear whether the subject of "these" is the insalubrious lunch wagons or the horsecars that were converted into those things. It is, of course, the latter. I had all sorts of problems with that sentence. As you said, it is too long.

Thanks again. - Sitush (talk) 01:34, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]

All sorted out now, thanks. - Sitush (talk) 01:57, 18 January 2016 (UTC)[reply]