Talk:Thomas of Bosnia/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Iazyges (talk · contribs) 15:17, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Will start soon. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 15:17, 20 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Criteria

GA Criteria

GA Criteria:

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1.b Y
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2.a Y

2.b Y

2.c Y

2.d Y (10.7% is highest, due only to name of a source being mentioned here and there.)
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3.b Y
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6.b Y

No DAB links Y
No Dead links Y
Images appropriately licensed Y
Citations N
- References 12, 33, 41, 46, and 52 have a hyphen for a page range. They need to have "–".
- One of the sources is Ćošković 2005 in citations, but Ćošković 2009 in Bibliography, pick whichever is correct and standardize.

Prose Suggestions

Lede

An illegitimate son of King Ostoja, Thomas succeeded King Tvrtko II, but his accession was not recognized by the leading magnate of the Kingdom of Bosnia, Stjepan Vukčić Kosača. suggest linking magnate here.
and married the insubordinate nobleman's daughter Catherine. suggest and married the insubordinate nobleman's daughter, Catherine.
Thomas waged a war throughout his reign with the Serbian Despotate over the lucrative mining town of Srebrenica and its surroundings, in addition to (or in conjunction with) multiple conflicts with his father-in-law. suggest Throughout his reign, Thomas waged a war with the Serbian Despotate over the lucrative mining town of Srebrenica and its surroundings, in addition to (or in conjunction with) multiple conflicts with his father-in-law.
first ruler of Bosnia to engage in religious persecution. here, does this mean the Kingdom of Bosnia? I'd recommend you mention if so, because as read it suggests that no religious persecution had ever taken point up until then.
For the infobox, I suggest changing the religious part from
Roman Catholic

previously Bosnian Christian
to
Bosnian Christian

Roman Catholic (later)
- Thank you for all your comments! "Ruler of Bosnia" means ruler of the state called Bosnia, not ruler of any state which included the territory of what would later be known as Bosnia. In other words, "ruler of Bosnia" means bans and kings of Bosnia (people listed at List of rulers of Bosnia). Religious persecution did take place in the Roman Empire, but there was no Bosnia at that time. As for religion, Thomas was Roman Catholic for the majority of his reign, so I thought that that should be emphasized. Surtsicna (talk) 11:18, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
  - @Surtsicna: Sounds good; I'll pass the article once the citational issues are dealt with. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:12, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
    - Have I not fixed them, Iazyges? Surtsicna (talk) 14:13, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
      The SFNs for Ćošković use 2005, while the bibliography uses 2009. In order for harv references to work properly they need to have the same date. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 14:17, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
      - Ah, I thought it was just this one. Surtsicna (talk) 14:26, 28 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]

Accession to coronation

Thomas, however, hastened to send word of his accession to foreign rulers, including the German king Frederick IV and Ragusan and Venetian authorities, hoping for recognition. suggest Because of this, Thomas hastened to send word of his accession to foreign rulers, including the German king Frederick IV and Ragusan and Venetian authorities, hoping to recieve recognition.
when Thomas pleased the Holy See to be cleared of the "stain of illegitimacy" as well as for an annulment of his union with Vojača. suggest when Thomas improved relations the Holy See in order to be cleared of the "stain of illegitimacy" as well as to receive an annulment of his union with Vojača.
@Surtsicna: That is all my comments, I will pass the review once the issues with the citations are dealt with. Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 17:41, 21 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]
- @Surtsicna: Repinging. -- Iazyges Consermonor Opus meum 19:36, 27 February 2018 (UTC)[reply]