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Reviewer: MathewTownsend (talk · contribs) 19:20, 12 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

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Interesting if complicated reading for me - I'm unfamiliar with most of the article's content. I don't really know much about Puritans.

  • Lede could be expanded some to be more descriptive - like what was Danforth's religious beliefs?
  • "colonial Massachusetts. He served for many years as one of the colony's" - "colonial Massachusetts" to me doesn't mean a specific colony, but "the colony's" is used in the next sentence Clarified Magic♪piano 18:21, 15 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "a conservative declaration that the colonial government was essentially sovereign except where its laws conflicted with English law." - I'm not familiar with English law regarding religion but didn't they have some? did the monarchy control the English church?
  • "Danforth's politics and religion were relatively conservative" - could be more specific about what relatively conservative means in this case?
  • "were sent to England to argue the colony's case" - which was what?
  • " Colonial agents then purchased the territory" - again, this seems vague to me as weren't there other colonies? - the Colony's agents?
  • "King Philip's War" - perhaps a little more explanation of what this war was, as the reader might assume that some king of England, Spain or whatever was involved somehow.
  • would a little context for linked names be ok? - it would give more of a sense of what was happening - e.g. magistrate Simon Bradstreet, Puritan missionary John Eliot, etc. Readers like me need all the help we can get to understand the situation
  • "refused to make changes to its administration that were demanded by King Charles" - like what changes were demanded?
  • "excluded Danforth from their councils, given his opposition to crown authority" - clarify why - was the Dominion a crown colony? - readers shouldn't have to click on every link to get the picture.
    • I've added some words here, but I thought it was clear that (1) the dominion governors were appointed by the crown, and (2) Danforth already had a track record of opposing crown control of the colony. Magic♪piano 18:21, 15 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Salem End Road in Framingham is now in the area where they settled" - the importance of this isn't clear until later in the article - it just seems like an unnecessary detail the way it's presented here.

An interesting insight into the times. I don't see any other issues.

Best wishes, MathewTownsend (talk) 18:25, 14 September 2012 (UTC)[reply]

GA review-see WP:WIAGA for criteria (and here for what they are not)

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    a. prose: clear and concise, respects copyright laws, correct spelling and grammar:
    b. complies with MoS for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, summary style and list incorporation:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    a. provides references to all sources in the section(s) dedicated to footnotes/citations according to the guide to layout:
    b. provides in-line citations from reliable sources where necessary:
    c. no original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic:
    b. it remains focused and does not go into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
  4. Does it follow the neutral point of view policy.
    fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    no edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    a. images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
    b. images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:
    pass!