Talk:Think About It (Melanie C song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 22:54, 2 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
It is broad in its coverage.
a (major aspects): b (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/Fail:

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Mick Hansen should be linked

Lead

Link singer-songwriter
Put (2011) after The Sea
Write each individual songwriter, then say who produced the song
The track → "Think About It"
was released after the single "Rock Me" → You just said that that Think About It was the first single?
, prior to the release Melanie had spent time on the West-End Blood Brothers which she said helped her develop and evolve as an artist. → This should be a new sentence.
The song is a dance-pop song → Musically, "Think About It" draws influence from dance-pop
Link dance-pop
Melanie → Melanie C
a departure from the usual rock-stance Melanie had taken in her career since 1999 it gathered comparisons to artists; → Awful construction
lyrically the song discusses doing something that you know you shouldn't. → Should be a new sentence here
Critically the song gathered near acclaim, → Makes no sense at all
than the previous → previous what?
to her fifth studio album The Sea → We already know it's her fifth studio album
Commercially the song was a moderate hit → Reword
A music video directed Howard Greenhalgh showed her perform against different backdrops and in different outfits throughout. → Again, poor wording

General points

There are numerous issues in the other sections, poor phrasing and grammar (For example: A music video for "Think About It" was released, directed by Howard Greenhalgh, her official website described it saying it "provides the song with a varied canvas – bursts of vivid colour and imagery – that's if you can try and take your eyes off Melanie in a selection of stunning outfits!") Pictures have poor captions. One of the references has a double quotation mark in it, plus there are wrong/missing work and publisher parameters. Also cases of WP:OR in the article. A Credits and personnel section should also be added. Sorry, but I am failing as the article is under prepared with basic mistakes which should not be here. I think this article could become a GA, but it needs to be thoroughly copy edited. I suggest you list for a Peer Review or request a GOCE. Calvin • ^{Watch n' Learn} 01:16, 3 December 2011 (UTC)[reply]