Talk:Thessaloniki Metro/GA1

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Reviewer: 1.02 editor (talk · contribs) 10:01, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Hi there i'll be taking this review. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 10:01, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Review

Lead

the lead is quite poorly phrased. "...is an underground rapid-transit system under construction in Greece, to serve the city of Thessaloniki" sounds odd, maybe "...is an underground rapid-transit system serving the city of Thessaloniki in Greece" or something similar would do. try to mention the fact that it is under construction to the section in the lead where it talks about the cost of the project.

I agree, it was recently changed. I will change it to "an underground rapid-transit system under construction in Thessaloniki, Greece's second-largest city". --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Construction by a Greek-Italian consortium is overseen by Attiko Metro..." does the consortium have a name? it may be useful to include it.

As far as I'm aware it does not have a name. Attiko Metro supervises and represents the companies that have partnered up to build the system. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"A request for tender will be issued for the western loop in the autumn of 2018." any update to this?

No update on this. How would you suggest this be treated? --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

maybe "A request for tender for the western loop was planned for release in the autumn of 2018." would work? the most important fact here is if the tender has been issued, as it will result in how the sentence will be phrased. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 02:29, 5 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, I will reword it to that effect. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

1910s and 1980s proposals

i suggest removing or combining the first sentence of this section as it feels out of place.

I have merged them. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

is the low depth of the tunnels from the 1989 construction a good or bad thing as it is hard to tell from reading the sentence.

It is bad, as it would have disrupted the archaeological works. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

It ultimately failed, due to a series of..." -> "The project ultimately failed, due to a series of..."

Done. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

also it may be a good idea to change the year in the section name to the exact year since there is only 1 proposal per decade

I have changed it to 1918 and 1988 proposals. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Present System

"Although Line 1 has been delayed..." Delayed by what?

Changed to Although Line 1 has been delayed by extensive archaeological works. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"Line 1 runs within the municipality of Thessaloniki, the core of the Thessaloniki urban area." can you clarify which one is Thessaloniki city?

Thessaloniki refers to both the urban area and the Municipality (the core). The urban area is made up of 6 municipalities, including the Municipality of Thessaloniki, and one municipal unit (subdivision of a municipality). The city doesn't have a unified government. This map explains it better. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks for the clarification. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 02:29, 5 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

from what i read, i am assuming that line 2 is independent of line 1. is this correct?

This is what is being implied. The two will share tunnels, but Attiko Metro have specified that trains will run directly from Mikra to the New Railway Station, making it an independent line. That being said, we don't have that much information at the moment and the diagrams that are available show the phasing of the tunnels - they don't indicate lines. But like I said, Attiko Metro appears to treat it as an independent line going from the New Railway Station to Mikra and calling at all stations, as opposed to a line going from Mikra to 25 Martiou as implied by the diagrams. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

"A September 2018 Attiko Metro press release referred to "the two lines under construction"." what does this have to do with line 2?

This has to do with the confusion referred to above. It can be removed if you think it does not contribute. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

I think it is better to remove it as it may confuse readers. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 02:29, 5 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Removed. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

maybe try to mention how many stations each line has, it is quite staple for all transport articles.

Done. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

in the future projects section there is another outdated sentence similar to the one in the lead which needs to be updated.

See response to that point. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Updated. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Rest of the article

the first 2 sentences in the park and ride section can be combined to make it shorter.

Done. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Also include the confirmed fare of the metro if there is one in the same section as the survey results.

No information on the actual fare is available. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

the information in the table for the archaeological finds at each station's location should be included at the station page and not here, only the major finds should be included here (which i note is already done)

Removed. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

gallery sections are generally discouraged from being put in articles and there is nothing extraordinary there so i suggest removing it (correct me if i'm wrong)

Removed. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

refs look ok, no copyvio or disambigs detected, no recent edit wars or issues with this page

Thanks for taking the time to review the article. Please note that I need to update the animated gif to take into account the updated timetable, I will let you know when that is done. I have also expanded the section on the depot, please be sure to take a look. --Michail (blah) 13:22, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The new depot section looks fine, except the use of the word 'price tag' sounds odd in this context. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 02:29, 5 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Updated to and a total cost of. Also, I've updated the gif showing the evolution of the system to show the updated timetable of operation. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

second look

"Some finds discovered on the line, primarily at Venizelou, will make up the world's first open archaeological site in a metro station." this sentence is vague, is Venizelou the only station to feature this? if not then maybe mention the total or projected number of stations to feature this. Also, what are the finds mentioned in the sentence?

We don't know how many of the station will feature exhibits (presumably all of them that have had discoveries made during excavations), but Venizelou will be the only one to feature an archaeological site as opposed to a small archaeological museum. That is to say, the site will be left as it is for visitors to enter, similar to the acropolis, medieval catacombs, and other such archaeological sites. In Athens there is no such station, but there are stations with exhibits. This is different in the sense that it is not curated, it is what was found, as it was found, without disturbance. In Athens and other metro systems it is a curated collection put on display inside glass cases. Here, it will be open-air. We know from drawings how this will work, it will be publically accessible before entering the actual station, which will be below the archaeological site. I will reword this to make it clearer that there is a distinction between what happens at Venizelou and at the other stations. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Just a suggestion here, but the future extensions section is rather small, so i suggest converting it to a subsection (level 3 header) and put it below the Line 2 subsection, which would also require the renaming of the 'Present system' section to just 'System'

I'll merge it with the section and call it System per your suggestion. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

The information regarding the rolling stock of the metro needs more content. Information such as the start date of construction and cost of the stock is missing.

I can't find that level of information, it's not publically available (not that I can find it at least). Is it necessary? --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

it will be good if you can mention that the system uses third rail and the gauge of the track in prose and not just the infobox.

I will add this information in prose. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Comments

article looks good although phrasing is patchy, article length and coverage is good, there is an adequate level of depth in this article although there are certain aspects that could be improved. i am putting this on hold until the issues that i have identified have been resolved. Thanks 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 11:20, 4 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

@Philly boy92: I have replied to you on certain points that i feel still needs some work on. a second look through the article showed considerable improvement but i have also found some new areas which will need improvement and will list them above. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 02:29, 5 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks, let me know what you think after my second wave of revisions. --Michail (blah) 14:32, 11 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]

All the concerns raised has been addressed, and the current state of the article is in satisfactory condition, do note that the article should be promptly updated with more information when it becomes available. With that I will be passing this article. 1.02 editor (C651 set 217/218) 05:58, 12 January 2019 (UTC)[reply]