Talk:Thelma (1910 film)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 09:29, 20 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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Could add a "Based on" parameter as it is based on a novel.

Lead

short drama produced → short drama film produced
The story was adapted from → Based on
Sir Phillip finds her there and the tricks is uncovered and the two embrace each other in love. → Sir Phillip searches for Thelma, ultimately finding her, uncovers the tricks which have been played on them and they fall back in love.

Plot

Thought → Though
I've never seen a plot or synopsis section made up entirely of two quotes. This needs to be for the most part paraphrased into original text and not so reliant on quotes.

This is the official plot because no other version exists which can possibly convey that which is shown. The movie is greatly shortened from the original work and with a >15 min run time the plot is a minute adaptation from the whole work. I've credited the original (and out of copyright) entirety from the official release that was published in the work as a result. Otherwise the plot would be impossible to be accurate - for almost no living person would have seen the film, much less recall it. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:27, 24 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Production

The story was adapted from the Thelma, → Thelma is a film adaptation of the novel of the same name,

Release and reception

and credits, the → and credits, and the
Tack the one line paragraph onto the end of the previous one, there's no point splitting it off like this and separating it with unnecessary white gaps.

Outcome

Short and sweet article. On hold. — ₳aron 10:45, 26 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Calvin999: - All fixes done. Sorry for the delay. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 17:25, 24 May 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Sorry I didn't see this. Passing. — Calvin999 08:09, 3 June 2015 (UTC)[reply]

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