Talk:Theje/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:55, 4 February 2022 (UTC)

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

After reviewing a good number of your Eurovision contest articles, here is a song review! --K. Peake 21:55, 4 February 2022 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Rather than having the ref for the English title in the infobox, you should source it in a relevant area of the body

I've placed that part in the beginning of the Composition and reception section Iaof2017 (talk) 12:23, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

• The release sentence should be swapped with writing/production for the correct order
• ""Theje" is an" → "The song is an"
• Pipe ballad to Sentimental ballad
• The critical reception sentence should come directly before the lyric video
• "as well as on Ramosaj's" → "as well as Ramosaj's"
• Wikilink black and white
• Pipe LED screen to LED display

Background and release

• "stated that he intends to participate" → "revealed his intention to participate"
• Remove commas around Radio Televizioni Shqiptar (RTSH)
• Remove "of "Theje"" after the digital release part, as the term accompanying is already used

Composition and reception

• "as well as the production" → "as well as the production done"
• "and delve on a" → "and delves into a"
• "he forgive and continue" → "he forgave and continued"
• "received generally positive reviews" → "was met with generally positive reviews" but only critics appear to be sourced, not fans
• "In a review of ESCUnited" → "In a review for ESCUnited"
• "writer William found it building in" → "writer William saw as building in"
• "two following "epic" chorus'" → "two following "epic" choruses"

Festival i Këngës

• Remove introduction to RTSH because you have already done this previously
• "Although during his shows, Ramosaj's performance commences" → "During his shows, Ramosaj's performance commenced"
• Wikilink black and white
• "and eventually progresses" → "and eventually progressed" but where does the source actually mention this part?

I removed that part and merged it with the following portion [1]. Iaof2017 (talk) 12:30, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

• Dark imagery is not sourced
• Pipe LED walls to LED display
• "regarded by media" → "regarded by the media"
• [18][19][20][21][22] is too many citations at the end of one sentence, so move them around to relevant parts (preferably after punctuation)

Personnel

• Good

Track listing

• Good

Release history

• Format → Format(s)

References

• Copyvio score looks superb at 4.8%!!!
• Cite ESCplus as publisher instead on ref 4
• WP:OVERLINK of Apple Music on the second citation of ref 5
• Cite YouTube in the via parameter instead on ref 6
• WP:OVERLINK of Radio Televizioni Shqiptar on ref 13
• Cite Eurovoix as publisher instead on ref 14
• Cite Panorama as work/website instead on ref 18

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 08:57, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

Hi @Kyle Peake: hope you're good. I've solved your comments above with two notes by me. Greetings to you! Iaof2017 (talk) 12:36, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, fantastic work once again! --K. Peake 22:17, 5 February 2022 (UTC)

Thank you Kyle Peake for the review. :D Iaof2017 (talk) 22:27, 5 February 2022 (UTC)