Talk:The Waterfall (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 19:32, 21 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Artwork needs an alt=
Don't really see the point of listing one studio then covering up the others with a collapsable?
How can an album be four different types of rock music?

and group → and the group's
My Morning Jacket rose to prominence in the 2000s with a string of acclaimed albums and praised live performances.→ Irrelevant.
Its sixth album → Their
was equally well received. → remove
located Stinson Beach, → located at Stinson Beach,
A deal of the album → Makes no sense
to its album art → to the artwork
His lyrics, likewise, → Wrong use of 'likewise'
including folk, R&B, and psychedelia. → These completely contradict the info box
who considered → many of whom considered
on the Billboard 200 in the U.S., → on the U.S. Billboard 200 album chart
and represented career bests in several countries' national album charts. → Like?
with a large → We don't need to know the size

Most of the first paragraph is pretty superfluous to be quite honest. Background shouldn't be dating back 18 years. Background is what is linked directly to this album, usually the last 2/3 years.
Albums need dates
touring behind his solo album → Odd phrasing
These individual side projects, rather than detach the musicians, worked to strengthen their skill as musicians, according to Blankenship. This led to a greater appreciation of the group upon their return to it. → This is a bit long winded and unclear

largely idyllic recording process. → A process isn't idyllic. A location is.
The band first began recording in late 2013, and took eighteen months to complete. → The band began recording for the album in late 2013, and it took eighteen months to complete.
For the album, → Remove
The band approached creating the album with a sense of freedom, → Bit clunky and awkward, could be simplified
material in 2016, although material → Repetition of 'material'
"existentialist R&B, nature-boy folk, wigged-out psychedelia, and jam-friendly arena rock." → These are attributed to the source, but other genres mentioned elsewhere in the article are not
Likewise, → Don't use this word

I'd just write Jim James for track one, then James thereafter. It looks odd having a column of writers without any writers in it

I'm concerned that this article has a slightly bias tone to it. On hold for 7 days. — Calvin999 19:54, 21 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Fail incurred due to no response in 7 days. — Calvin999 15:54, 28 October 2015 (UTC)[reply]