Talk:The Voice Within/GA1

GA Review

Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch

Reviewer: Adabow (talk · contribs) 07:24, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

Background and release

• "worldwide number-one hits" implies that the songs all went to #1 in every country.
• Most of this section (all but the final two sentences) seems related to the concept of the album, rather than this song specifically. Is it needed here?

I've merged the section.

Recording and composition

• File:The voice within (Radio edit).ogg should be cut to 25 s per WP:SAMPLE
• There is some very close paraphrasing, particularly from [1]
• Is So So Gay a reliable source for music critique?
• Epinions is user-generated, so is definitely unreliable.

Actually the album version of the song is 5 minutes, so I think 30 seconds is suitable here. Also, it's also only 65 kbps.

Reception

• The first half of this section reads like a complete WP:QUOTEFARM. Try to paraphrase comments.

•  Done

Music video

• More very close paraphrasing from [2]

•  Done I've cleaned up all — Simon (talk) 10:41, 13 November 2013 (UTC)

Track listings

• Does "Pock It! CD single" mean mini CD? If so, you should probably use mini CD as that is clearer and is not a brand name.

•  Done It's truly a mini CD — Simon (talk) 03:49, 14 November 2013 (UTC)

Summary

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose, no copyvios, spelling and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Some significant close paraphrasing. Also, I have carried out a fair amount of copyediting. In the future, please go over an article to make sure every sentence is clear and grammatically correct.

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   Some sources used which are unreliable for music critique

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   The review is on hold until the comments above have been addressed. Adabow (talk) 08:26, 9 November 2013 (UTC)

   OK, I am happy with the improvements made and am satisfied that the article meets the GA criteria now, and have listed the article. Adabow (talk) 07:37, 19 November 2013 (UTC)