Talk:The Time of Angels/GA1
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Reviewer: Malleus Fatuorum (talk · contribs) 22:13, 20 October 2011 (UTC)
- Lead
- "It was the very first episode to be filmed in the series". I'm not sure I quite follow that; are you saying that although it was the fourth episode in the fifth series it was filmed before all the other episodes in that series? Why?
- Yes, that was the way the production schedules went. Episodes 4 and 5 were the first to be filmed, then 2 and 3, then 1. No specific reason that I have found. None of the past series were filmed in order, either. Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "Most of the Weeping Angels in the episode were portrayed by young women who were painted and dressed in costumes, which director Adam Smith found difficult to work with." Surely people are routinely dressed in costumes in dramas? What was it exactly that Smith found difficult? That they were painted, that they wore costumes, or that that they were young women?
- Well, it's explained in the "filming and effects" section that this was because they had to remain still for long amounts of time; I have added it. Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "... received the highest Appreciation Index given to the fifth series thus far." Isn't the fifth season over? How could the ranking change?
- I changed it to "at time of broadcast". If you would like, I could add that it was beaten by "The Pandorica Opens" (88) and "The Big Bang" (89).
- Plot
- "The Doctor and Amy travel to a museum in the distant future and discovers a message from Dr River Song".
- Oops. I fixed it. Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "Dr. Song has met the Doctor numerous times before in her personal history". She met him in her personal history? Doesn't make sense.
- Well, I suppose that depends on your view of time travel. Please elaborate on what confuses you: the wording of "her personal history" or that she has met him more than he has met her. She has met him in his future, as seen in many future episodes, but that was previously in her timestream in this episode. Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- Compare "her personal history" with "her history": what's the difference? Malleus Fatuorum 01:41, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- I changed it to "her timestream" instead, as that is really the correct word for it. Glimmer721 talk 01:47, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- Looks much better. Malleus Fatuorum 02:00, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- I changed it to "her timestream" instead, as that is really the correct word for it. Glimmer721 talk 01:47, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- Compare "her personal history" with "her history": what's the difference? Malleus Fatuorum 01:41, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- Well, I suppose that depends on your view of time travel. Please elaborate on what confuses you: the wording of "her personal history" or that she has met him more than he has met her. She has met him in his future, as seen in many future episodes, but that was previously in her timestream in this episode. Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "... to help her capture the Angel before it becomes too powerful from the radiation leaked by the ship". I can't quite parse "too powerful from".
- I changed it to "before the radiation leaked from the ship makes it too powerful". I hope that makes sense. Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- Filming and effects
- "Scenes set on the surface of Alfava Metraxis were filmed at Southerndown beach, Vale of Glamorgan on 20 and 21 July 2009. 20 July was the first day of filming the series." That's rather ugly; sentences ought not to begin with a number, especially directly after another number as here. What about something like "Filming began on ..."?
- I've changed it to "Filming began on 20 July 2009 on Southerndown beach, Vale of Glamorgan, which was used as the surface of Alfava Metraxis. However, filming at the beach halted on 21 July 2009 because of torrential rain..." Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "... including the scene Karen Gillan auditioned with". Do you audition with a scene?
- Changed it to "the scene Karen Gillan read for her audition". Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "Director Adam Smith, new to Doctor Who, felt the pressure with making the episode ...". With making the episode?
- Changed to "felt pressure in making..." Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "A stunt double was used for some shots of the scene where River flies out of the Byzantium's airlock, but Alex Kingston wished to do some of it herself. The scene was filmed on a greenscreen with Kingston hooked up on wires ...". Why do we flip between Kingston and Alex Kingston?
- Removed "Alex". Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)
- "For the scene in which sand pours out of Amy's eye as she rubs it, an eye patch containing sand that would be released when Karen Gillan rubbed it was placed over Gillan's eye." Same thing here, sometimes Gillan, sometimes Karen Gillan.
- Removed "Karen" and replaced second "Gillan" with "her". Glimmer721 talk 01:37, 21 October 2011 (UTC)