Talk:The Ritz Hotel, London/GA1
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 11:47, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
I've actually been inside the Ritz before, and the amount of times I've passed it! JAGUAR 11:47, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
Initial comments
[edit]Lead
[edit]- WP:LEADLENGTH is OK, but I would recommend splitting the third paragraph into two since the lead is quite long
- If you want to split it, I would recommend doing it at where it starts off with "The Ritz's most widely known facility is the Palm Court..."
- I shuffled it around so exterior and interior info is split.♦ Dr. Blofeld 14:16, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
- "Opened by Swiss hotelier César Ritz in May 1906, eight years after opening the Hôtel Ritz Paris, after a weak beginning the hotel began to gain popularity towards the end of World War I" - slightly choppy, may sound better re-arranged as Opened by Swiss hotelier César Ritz in May 1906, eight years after opening the Hôtel Ritz Paris, The Ritz London began to gain popularity towards the end of World War I after a weak beginning or something similar to that?
- yes, it was too long, I've reworded it.
- "The interior was designed mainly by London and Paris based designers in the Louis XVI style" - can this be linked to something? Was there a period of Louis XVI's reign like the Elizabethan or Victorian era?
- "to resemble bar on the Orient Express" - missing plural? Or is it a bar?
the bar ;-)
Body
[edit]- I've replaced some instances of American Spelling with British Spelling throughout the article
- Thankyou.
- "while other hotels like the Buckingham Palace" - is this a hotel unrelated to Buckingham Palace?
- Reworded, and well-spotted BTW!
- "On 4 August 1914, Lady Diana's future husband" - who is Lady Diana?
- Added socialite and wikilink
- "Louis Mountbatten, 1st Earl Mountbatten of Burma frequented the Ritz from his time" - "frequently visited"?
- frequented is OK, even if a little pedantic nowadays.
- "The Queen Elizabeth The Queen Mother would also attend " - why not just "The Queen Mother"?
- Well, that is her full name, and at that time she'd have been known as Princess Elizabeth herself I think, but I've piped to The Queen Mother anyway.
- "In the 1970s, the hotel fell into a turbulent period. Terrorist threats from the IRA" - this is the first mention of the IRA, so it should be written and linked as Irish Republican Army
- Indeed.
- "There has been criticism because the Ritz has not paid any corporation tax since being taken over by the Barclay twins" - are the twins the current owners? This is the first ever mention of them
- They were linked but piped with the company named, I've altered it further up.
- "The hotel's flooring was also fireproof" - is it still fireproof or was it only made fireproof during the war?
- Still fireproof of course!
- " Between the Winter Garden and the central Grand Gallery is a screene featuring two Ionic columns" - no citation for this
- Same citation as above I think, moved it down to bottom. Screene was a typo too.
- "As of 2015, The Ritz London has a 134 guestrooms" - no need for "a"
- removed.
- "The hotel is mentioned in the song "A Nightingale Sang in Berkeley Square" as well as in the song "Good Old Fashioned Lover Boy" (Queen)." - should end with "by Queen" and where is the citation?
- Added a citation and changed.♦ Dr. Blofeld 17:56, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
References
[edit]- Ref 80 is dead
- Replaced.
On hold
[edit]It took me ages to read through this article, and am very impressed by how comprehensive and well written it is! I only spotted a few prose issues, and there is one dead ref, but other than that this is so close to meeting the GA criteria. This would make an amazing FA too. JAGUAR 14:21, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
@Jaguar: Thanks for the review, all addressed I think. Some excellent points here!♦ Dr. Blofeld 18:03, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
- Thanks for addressing them! This looks good to go. Another luxury hotel GA
JAGUAR 18:41, 1 July 2015 (UTC)
