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Reviewer: Good888 (talk · contribs) 09:42, 22 January 2015 (UTC)
And time for another lost film article review. It should be up soon. good888 (talk) 09:42, 22 January 2015 (UTC)
Lead section
- "The film is now considered to be lost." Rewrite to: "The film is now presumed lost."
Plot
- "Film begins with the Dreamer" The film would be better.
- "The Dreamer decides to become a man" I would perfer "The Dreamer decides to man up"
- "Her father wishes for her to marry wealthy gentleman who is also a stranger in the town." I am guessing you meant A wealthy gentleman?
- "A woman finds him, "The Desert Flower" Suggest rewriting to: "A woman finds a man who calls himself "The Desert Flower"
- "The stranger is sent out into the desert and the Dreamer and his wife return to the town." May I ask why the stranger was sent out into the desert?
Cast
- Who did George Periolat play as?
Production
- Link Pickett Guard and Parade's Gone By. I know they are red links but I am guessing that they might be created soon.
- "Newspaper accounts change to reference the film as having three reels by October 3, 1913." Change erm change to changed.
- "Newspaper references begin to reference the final title on October 24, 1913." Change begin to began.
Impact and fate
- I would perfer renaming this section to "Reception and fate"
- Link Moving Picture World.
References
- Link the publishers of these sources if possible.
Placing it on hold for now. I will promote once the issues are addressed. good888 (talk) 14:10, 23 January 2015 (UTC)
- @Good888: all fixes done, but the book does not cite a role for George Periolat. Identification probably came from a credit or role that was later indicated, but never attributed directly. The stranger being sent out into the desert? Well, it is certainly open to attribution - but it could be taken a number of ways. The Dreamer could be sending him off to where he came from, the figure could be cast out from the returning "Conqueror", or he could be sent out to become a man. Much interpretation can be derived from silents because they lack clear direction for most things. The records I've dug up suggest that the individual viewer was left to decide from themselves why - if they wanted to debate over it - the man was sent off into the desert. Mos of the time the silent actors will mouth words and carry on a conversation without a title card at all - leaving the viewer to formulate minor exchanges. This one has no concrete "reason" given and so is open to interpretation. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 16:21, 23 January 2015 (UTC)
- Since the issues have been addressed, I am going to promote this article to good article class. Good work, and it is interesting to see there is no confirmed reason why he went to the desert. Hopefully somebody will find this film one day... good888 (talk) 18:38, 23 January 2015 (UTC)
- @Good888: all fixes done, but the book does not cite a role for George Periolat. Identification probably came from a credit or role that was later indicated, but never attributed directly. The stranger being sent out into the desert? Well, it is certainly open to attribution - but it could be taken a number of ways. The Dreamer could be sending him off to where he came from, the figure could be cast out from the returning "Conqueror", or he could be sent out to become a man. Much interpretation can be derived from silents because they lack clear direction for most things. The records I've dug up suggest that the individual viewer was left to decide from themselves why - if they wanted to debate over it - the man was sent off into the desert. Mos of the time the silent actors will mouth words and carry on a conversation without a title card at all - leaving the viewer to formulate minor exchanges. This one has no concrete "reason" given and so is open to interpretation. ChrisGualtieri (talk) 16:21, 23 January 2015 (UTC)
Why not put one or two of the surviving Chaney photos onto this page, which show the makeups he used in both roles he played? The photos can be seen at http://lonchaney.org/filmography/5a.htmlBigBoyWilliams (talk) 17:10, 1 October 2020 (UTC)